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lots of actions are coming indeed...Thank you for playing my gameCurvy Milfs and fashion business, many intersting actions in changing rooms are coming
Awesome looking Milfs!
mc is even handsome, he is most good looking mc in this month, damn weirdo. he should be ugly like other male mcs
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Harem , cheating , seduction are already planned tags of my game....thanks for playingBiggest question: will this get the harem tag?
Asking for a friend, obviously.
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I Will try to get better dialogues in the future updates
Thank you for playing my game
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Harem , cheating....
Thank you for playing my game brother
Thanks you for your nice words it means alot to me...
i hope you a good times with my game in the future updates... and boss's wife especially hhh
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first thank you for playing my game and giving me these advices...they are the best
- about the tags...yes harem and cheating are in the future updates
- mc office : will try to do my best to change a little bit of its general look
- english : Unfortunatelly english is my 3rd language and I am struggling with the grammar and phrases but will do my best in next update...to be honest with you i cant hire an english guy to read my script for now but will see about that later...
- about the MC's thoughts : they are only in first version...i want the player to find out how my mc is thinking and how to react to others....i know there is a lot of times he is thinking but will fix that soon
- about the gaps : "an innocent virgin" it was the first impression of that character....she might not be a virgin...who knows ?
"Andrea marital problems" : She was talking about her family and she mentioned her daughter then she suddenly becomes silent thats why the mc thought there might be martial problems...thats all of it
"boss's trip" : Mc is not working every day he said that he works only when they call him and sometimes they dont call him in a month !.... so he didnt know about the trip
finally ,thank you again for these opinions and advices I will save them in my notes and definitely will read them again and again
have a wonderful day brother
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Hey Dev! Please apply for Developer's Badge here: https://f95zone.to/tickets/categories/general-support.2/createlots of actions are coming indeed...Thank you for playing my game
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Or your characters become slim and flat milfs instead of curvy
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Hmm there might be some mature action in next updates ...who knows?all 3 ladies look yummy, some even older would be nice
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Hi dev, is French your mother tongue by any chance?
Anyway, I loved the curviness in these girls. Usually, when I read "curvy" in this type of games I fear that's a euphemism for "fat" but in this case they had really sexy curves. Juicy meat to their bones, love handles, fun bags..., a paradise for men of culture.
The story though... Firstly, please, find someone to help you with English. On this site there's a section where you can get in touch with native speakers who will be happy to help. I'm not even a native speaker of English, but I felt uncomfortable reading some pieces.
Secondly, I don't know how to put it, but many of the situations and interactions made no sense.
As someone pointed out, his office looks weird. The train is not a train, it's a small living room.
He lives in the countryside where there's literally "nothing to do" but we never see the nature, just the city. If it's gonna be like that, you could just have said he lived in the suburbs. There was no need for him to live in a place that is never shown.
Why does Andrea's daughter get so angry at him and call him a creep? They didn't even talk on the train. You just wanted to set her up as an antagonist from the beginning, but the solution you found was poor.
And well, I could mention a few more things, like the silly "Catholic quarter" of the city where there are girls dressed like nuns who then work as baristas dressed in skimpy clothes, and whose dads are some sort of Catholic priest (which is impossible or they'd be forced to quit priesthood). If it's a strange cult, you should not imply that they are Catholics. Catholic priests are called priests (not preachers) and can have no offspring or get married.
Finally, sex with Jayden herself was too fast. She seemed like and interesting girl, yet she has sex the second time she speaks to the MC. If you wanted to put sex in the first chapter of the game, there should have been a way to find a secondary girl or something, but a main LI like her, a primary romantic focus of the game, should not be treated so lightly. It was too rushed.
Anyway, I loved the curviness in these girls. Usually, when I read "curvy" in this type of games I fear that's a euphemism for "fat" but in this case they had really sexy curves. Juicy meat to their bones, love handles, fun bags..., a paradise for men of culture.
The story though... Firstly, please, find someone to help you with English. On this site there's a section where you can get in touch with native speakers who will be happy to help. I'm not even a native speaker of English, but I felt uncomfortable reading some pieces.
Secondly, I don't know how to put it, but many of the situations and interactions made no sense.
As someone pointed out, his office looks weird. The train is not a train, it's a small living room.
He lives in the countryside where there's literally "nothing to do" but we never see the nature, just the city. If it's gonna be like that, you could just have said he lived in the suburbs. There was no need for him to live in a place that is never shown.
Why does Andrea's daughter get so angry at him and call him a creep? They didn't even talk on the train. You just wanted to set her up as an antagonist from the beginning, but the solution you found was poor.
And well, I could mention a few more things, like the silly "Catholic quarter" of the city where there are girls dressed like nuns who then work as baristas dressed in skimpy clothes, and whose dads are some sort of Catholic priest (which is impossible or they'd be forced to quit priesthood). If it's a strange cult, you should not imply that they are Catholics. Catholic priests are called priests (not preachers) and can have no offspring or get married.
Finally, sex with Jayden herself was too fast. She seemed like and interesting girl, yet she has sex the second time she speaks to the MC. If you wanted to put sex in the first chapter of the game, there should have been a way to find a secondary girl or something, but a main LI like her, a primary romantic focus of the game, should not be treated so lightly. It was too rushed.
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Thank you for these notes
my native lang. isnt french too.. about the english mistakes i will be happy if i find someone on this site to help.. will search for someone
about some scenes: the train i should render an image to show it from outside..yes thats good point also the MC's town should be shown too , the reason i did not show it yet because its too heavy (even 32gb of ram couldnt handle it without struggling)
About Andrea's daughter....at this point you cant discuss about the character without knowing too much about her...Its just the first version i will show her personality clearly later...
And the biggest problem is the catholic square...its just a secondary story (if i said its right) I dont have too much for it and if you call it priest there is no problem for me to change it(I dont see it as a big deal)
About the sex with Jaylen...Until now I dont see her as Main character....And yea i had to put some sex in the first version just to not make people hate me hhhhhhh
Yes thank you again...As I always say Im still learning form nice people like you
have a good day
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Thank you for your kind reply.
I'm curious now: if Jaylen is not a main character, who will be the main female characters in the game?
BTW, I just want to say that in my opinion the sexiest and most beautiful of all girls is Marvilla
Marvilla ,Andrea,MC those for sureThank you for your kind reply.
I'm curious now: if Jaylen is not a main character, who will be the main female characters in the game?
BTW, I just want to say that in my opinion the sexiest and most beautiful of all girls is Marvilla
Amanda(The secretary) and Jaylen not sure yet
New characters (2 maximum) will be added to the mains too (I made some flexbility to the story to let the fans decide which they love most)
And yea i think Marvilla is hot but let me tell a secret she is not my favourite hhhhh
thankssss....I did today after reading your comment...Then Our characters will still Curvy yaaaaaayHey Dev! Please apply for Developer's Badge here: https://f95zone.to/tickets/categories/general-support.2/create
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Thank you!
Your favourite is Andrea, that's obvious
OK, I'll be looking forward to the second episode to meet more curvy beauties.
Keep having fun while you work on it!
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