It's a good start. I really like how Lana is narrating some of the stuff on the pages, because it's her trying to give meaning, validation, and reason to what she's going to do with Daniel. It's just Lana's darker desires convincing her that this isn't so wrong and that she has a reasonable justification for her action. The way Daniel acts and how he develops with Lana are fantastic. He is providing some reassurance to Lana, as well as showing her that he is a confidant with reliable so that she feels more comfortable with him. Validating not only her feelings, but also her emotions and how she feels, as well as throwing more, fuel on the fire that Lana has with Alex. As Daniel mentions, Lana went with him to seek male validation and approval that she didn't get with Alex, more so when Daniel guesses what Lana is thinking at that moment. He doesn't want Lana to tell him you want this because Daniel needs to hear it, he knows, he's simply looking for Lana to accept how he feels. Which ends up being better, because in the end we get out of that, status quo that keeps on Lana, refusing to admit how she feels about Daniel, and also accepting who she is deep down, with that same admitting how she truly feels about Daniel and accepting that he is the perfect lover, that every single thing Daniel does earns him points and each time Alex loses more and more until he has none left.