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But, the operation is a lie, Pedro shouldn't leave yet, Sarah won't be able to live without him. even if he perverts alicia.
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Daval clearly needs a writer, that occurred to him this afternoon.
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I have already suggested a screenwriter on the forum and on X (ex-Tweeter) for at least a year.
I also wrote to him personally.
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Why? It is well written in Spanish, except for putting a comma or accent in some letter, but what it means is perfectly understood
He IS gonna to f... Lana, Sara, Peter, also the reader
I mean about the story, Daval writes it day by day and in a hurry it occurred to him to include Aron in the story that same day and because of ideas like this the congruence of the story is greatly lost David should be the first to approach Alice but I think Daval hates David's character, first the old man takes Sarah away from him and now Aron is the one who is getting closer to Alice.
I think the opposite, Aron is a character who has been there since the beginning, and he had a purpose, and that is going to be to go after Alice, David does not necessarily have to be the main character, as in a continuous line, like any other script, here goes There is intrigue on one side and the other, and in the end Peter is going to subdue David's aunt and sister, and Aron as a participant...hahahaha.
Any plot jump is welcome... and so it's not boring and linear.
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If you ask me, I think Aaron was always going to be included, he's also the one who spent more time with Alice (while Sarah and David fucked) and that's sad because talk about how little development there has been between David and Alice, still think David is the MC and he should be the one in charge, but sharing with Aaron would be better than sharing with Peter.
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Well David fanboys are going to lose their 
cause looks like he is the one getting cucked/ntr'd now .... since Peter stole Sarah away from him and now it looks like Aaron gonna steal Alice away from him too
The only way this ends without bloodshed is an all out Orgy Finale for the final chapter.
cause looks like he is the one getting cucked/ntr'd now .... since Peter stole Sarah away from him and now it looks like Aaron gonna steal Alice away from him too The only way this ends without bloodshed is an all out Orgy Finale for the final chapter. 
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Just because the writing can be read, doesn't make it GOOD writing. He needs a writer because hes writing these stories like a chicken with its head cut off, willy nilly, spur of the moment crap. Dude probably doesnt know what hes going to do for the next pages, let alone the next chapter, until hes actually rendering it.
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Well, this IS like porn movies, someone has stories, (drama like taboo of the 80s,or Mario Salierri movies)and someone are gonzo(like Rocco Siffredi movies or Realitykings site), only the pleasure of f... Hahahaha...Daval IS a little Rocco
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Finally, a return to the order of good things in the story !
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