Nah bro i don't know if you are making this game as a passion project or to make money (it's ok if so), when i got to tsumi part (9.5.1) i found it amusing, but knew instantly someone would come here and cry about it.
Tell your story man, if you don't mind getting ride this segment of the story you do you, but these fuckers here whine too much. It was kinda of a fresh air to dabble into the 4th wall with her, mainly i telling her that i couldn't listen to her
. Her story reminded me a bit of Detroit Become Human menu's scene after the ending.
Anyway good luck with the game, some other time i maybe drop a more in depth review about it.