I mean, its small right now so I just tested it out so my 2 cents:
Setting is pretty unique considering how it first seems so standard and for people that are into NTR and stuff, could be interesting.
Dialogue, damn that needs work, I am not a native english speaker myself, but that is really bad
Ngl, I gonna follow around, doesn't make a "masterpiece"-impression but seems interesting enough...
I mean, for my bi ass... if lil twink MC would get the guys cock overtime instead of his moms pussy we would really have somethign special here
And looks: Well, average, not bad for starting out I would say, good enough