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So I believe I’m all caught up on DD v4 now. Had some comments, of course:

PROS

That was a TON of content added at the school. An enormous roster of new characters to introduce/personify and I’m plenty impressed how you handled that so deftly; efficient, effective, and even organically. Props, brother. Nicely done. Needless to say there is plenty to be interested in there going forward. And I was pleased to see quite a few options in body types (and ethnicity) without much abandoning the way - and flair - you curve a pen. Real nice.

-plenty interested in Sifa. Miss Math Teacher is lava-red hott (I do love me a bit of a snotty asian kunt). And several others are certainly of interest. You built a lot of personalities there to choose from.

-Hospital: Dr Miller “the scientist”… wholly mollee. Looking forward to some of that! Most definitely enjoyed how the actual appointment with Lilith and Mom was handled. Real smart. Mom is simply handled flawlessly throughout the game; love it all.

-Appears to be some branching out/opening things up around town. Once you have more future options pieced together you might consider going backwards and fleshing some of that availability out. Lost “pages” spread around town is a nice attachment to that, for example (an organic time killer/consumer).

-I’m feeling plenty favorable towards Ashley. Like where all that’s going. Again, you’ve got a lot of personalities happening here and it’s relatively amazing how they all carve out heir own niche. Whatever her arc is, I’m into it ; )

-The Church thing is interesting. Make use of that Confessional, I would hope, eh?


CON

I noticed you made a change to Mom’s upper lip. Have to say I prefer her as initially presented, with a smooth/rounded upper lip. That’s a significant change, actually. I wouldn’t say it makes her less alluring but definitely alters her “softness” level. Some may find it more “fetching” or mature but I don’t think she needed it (nor benefits from it); she’s got a fine balance of maturity and innocence in how she handles things, assertive enough when she needs to be while the vulnerability factor is present and necessary to make it all work (imo).

I’m wondering how the rest of the board has received that alteration? As the creator it’s obviously (and respectfully) YOUR CHOICE to go with whatever is most preferred. But to my way of thinking, she had already met perfection prior.


Thanks for the offering, mate! Glad it’s out there and here’s hoping you find it rewarding enough to continue.

-cheers
 
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Personally, I like the more "high-tier" love interests to take time, so we can have many super high sexual-tension situations etc. For example the scene where she goes to pick up his boxers and is greeted by a morning pole. That was probably my favourite part of this update, and more scenes of the sort can be added as things slowly progress, instead of the immediate jump to the end game of that character.
[Yes, I'm going WAY back in the thread to pick up where I left off; got a Sunday to wank around with, eh]

Couldn't agree more with the assessment above. And I could not be more impressed (and invigorated) by how the Mom has been handled. It's certainly a tricky balance to keep on moving the chains while retaining several "first downs" left to Score. Breadman has done a masterful job holding true to that method and not cave-in to what people might think is best for them to have, asap. Every fuckin yard I make with her (as the MC), is goddamn glorious.

Just keep movin' the sticks, bro ; )

-And yes, there's plenty else to enjoy a quick hit on while Mommy's little cunny gets all warmed up for surrender...
 

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So Bread, I gotta say I love how you use Lillith in the story. The fact that she actually "does" stuff and basically is always "around" and willing to interfere is great...unlike some other storys were it just comes down to encounters and "do this and that" dialogues.
Agreed. That hospital scene was a real nice surprise. Not just "interfere" but even facilitate (which is what a demon might be prone to do, btw). As a storyteller myself - and by that, I mean understands these sorts of things architecturally; craftsmanship - that was a real beaut. There's a whole lotta room for fucking up there. He could have compromised the mother unwillingly and that would have completely torched the character he's built with her. Instead, he's got a demon in the room manufacturing the whole thing and we STILL find the mother to be authentic and believable. That's good shit, man (plus, I really like how he drew her sudden/accidental hand inarguably compelled to properly nurture and inform MC's exploding sack; that's genius).

But to simplify all that... I think it's a plenty smart move to have Lilith in there guiding things to her preferred end, at times. The OP is correct to recognize she's being used as a conduit and not simply a rule from above (or below, what have you). And it's not just convenient, we're not being cheated by it (as a viewer). In fact, the opposite may be true.

I wonder how all that might turn out, eh. And "wondering" is almost always a good thing.
 

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But I redid Babs anyways so HA! Still got new stuff to show!

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This was worth doing. She looks a lot better (while not abandoning the initial intent).

I'm totally into fucking an inferiority complex right out of a geeky girl. Like, way into it. But you softened her up here in a way that's less broken-like-a-tree and more... I dunno, simply overlooked I guess. A couple sessions with the iron cock and we'll have that posture fixed in no time ; )

-Do not leave her lowstph in the weeds, man. We gotta revisit that one at some point. (I can't WAIT to pinch her little titties!)
 

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I said the same thing mid stream about Chuckie, it clicked that he looks just like Mikey. I kinda dig it though, glad to see he moved to Vesper and is having fun with life haha
Chuckie was cool. He was likeable and not a total schlub.

Little shit like that matters, and you do a good job with it. Impressively concise and not long-winded in your ability to... present a dynamic thought (or character). Unlike some other people who might paste a thread with post after post of their own thoughts, one after another, eh ; )

(I'd shaddup, except, I'm enjoying myself so... on with it.)
 

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Chuckie was cool. He was likeable and not a total schlub.

Little shit like that matters, and you do a good job with it. Impressively concise and not long-winded in your ability to... present a dynamic thought (or character). Unlike some other people who might paste a thread with post after post of their own thoughts, one after another, eh ; )

(I'd shaddup, except, I'm enjoying myself so... on with it.)
can't reply to everything because - woah, but wanted to say I appreciate the feedback and am glad you're digging what I/we are putting out so far! I've hooked up with a writing partner as of last update so a lot of the charm of Ashley and Babs came from him - the hospital stuff and Leslie in general is all me still, so I will take credit for that haha

as for her upper lip, the dimple was actually there in v.01 I beleive and I changed it in v.02 or 3, went back on the idea and reintroduced it in v.04. So her lip's got a bit of a personality disorder, but I think I have it how I like it now

I think we got a lot of great stuff coming in v.05, looking forward to hearing your thoughts on it my dude
 

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Hannah joined the Bed last week, and she is not happy about sitting so close to Lucia!

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Nice. I look forward to that character becoming involved. As with the others, she's got her own niche (perfect positioning/pose for her there).

-and my apologies for going TOO far back in the thread and apparently doubling up on some shit. Ooops.
 

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can't reply to everything because - woah, but wanted to say I appreciate the feedback and am glad you're digging what I/we are putting out so far! I've hooked up with a writing partner as of last update so a lot of the charm of Ashley and Babs came from him - the hospital stuff and Leslie in general is all me still, so I will take credit for that haha

as for her upper lip, the dimple was actually there in v.01 I beleive and I changed it in v.02 or 3, went back on the idea and reintroduced it in v.04. So her lip's got a bit of a personality disorder, but I think I have it how I like it now

I think we got a lot of great stuff coming in v.05, looking forward to hearing your thoughts on it my dude
No worries, mate. It is indeed meant to be feedback. I'm not looking for response.

Your writing partner did a fine job with Ashley. That's interesting. She has an undercurrent much different from the rest and I think potentially quite necessary (though, as I said, they all have their own differentials). So that was a wise investment, mate.

-party on

PS I've got screengrabs. I'm into the mom, okay - the dimple wasn't there in v01. But I HAVE noticed it being adapted somewhat continuously in this most recent build. In the end, ya gotta go with what makes the best sense from your perspective. 100%
 
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