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Itsphred
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Keep doing what you're doing brotha, this is YOUR story! You tell it how you want it.. criticism is criticism.. Don't let it discourage you.. I Definitely like the introduction to the characters.. and as soon as I found out about the "kidnap" scene afterwards.. It gave a lot of us a sigh of relief lol ... If they Hate it so much.. let them go make their own story and come up with their own renders... Keep pushing bro.. You're doing a great job so far.. Can't wait for more updates =)
BC
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U just need to better walk the teasing line without all teasing being negging. it just isnt fun to play where other characters constantly belittle the MC.
And yeah the kidnapping was just off tonally, especially with it being a cliffhanger and then we are supposed to laugh about traumatizing a girl.
Even just writing the scene as those guys getting out of the car with fakes guns and briefly scaring them with a hold-up at the pick-up before immediately dropping their masks and trying to laugh would've done what you needed to do: establish some people as assholes, upset the girl, give the MC a chance to be a stand-up guy, etc.
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you try things and improve and we try to play and have fun. the more you improve, the more fun we will have. keep it up
Joey's Conscience
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Not sure if I'm one of those you'd consider "harsh", but that isn't the intention. My objective with reviews is to provide contructive criticism to devs whenever they are around, but most importantly, paint a picture of the game to other players, so they can decide if they wanna give it a go.
Hiding or sugarcoating issues with the game really isn't helpful to anyone. Take the last review, for instance (if it's still there, not sure if it's allowed), which is clearly just a generic copy-pasted review with the name of the game changed. Sure, it helps your overall score, but what is anyone supposed to take from that? You got no feedback, and the people reading have no idea what the game is like.
As for subjectiveness, ultimately that's all reviews are. Some people really value visuals, but others really value story. You will probably do well with the former, but worse with the latter. As the dev, you gotta know to filter what kind of feedback is helpful and can be improved upon. For instance, a lot of people brought up that the LIs look too similar, even the ones not related. So moving forward, maybe design the next one with more unique features, like short hair, darker skin tone, and so on.
As for the kidnapping, I agree with what most people said, but I'd just like to add that me, and probably others, though this was what would kickstart the plot proper. You ended on that cliffhanger, so we assumed it was gonna be this big thing that would change the course of the story. Maybe the MC would have to commit a crime himself to escape, maybe he would have to get involved with criminals, something along those lines. In the end, tho whole thing was super inconsequential, which is my biggest gripe with it.
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Jimskeleton
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Dev confirmed a few pages back she would be, I'm assuming all those in the gallery section will be a LI.
Thank you guys again for the replies, I appreciate it. And Joey's Conscience, everything you said was perfectly constructive. I was talking about the ones who over exaggerate stuff and shit on a game they got for free.
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While my comment was not a review, I'm sure it fit what you would consider harsh. It was meant that way to get your attention. I considered making it a review but, decided against taking it that far. In reading through the thread, it was obvious you try to accept criticism so, I wanted you to have that chance. There are a number of posts subsequent to mine that encourage you to see that scene as being, at the least, a bit over the top and, at most, offensive. What you do or do not do with that information is up to you. Obviously.
I have offered this exact advice on numerous occasions. I get that the intention was for it to be perceived as a sophomoric prank perpetrated by dumbass kids who just didn't know better. From the large majority of reactions you can see it didn't come off that way. Dude, that girl was TRAUMATIZED! Not a little bit, a lot. That's the way it's written. I could see how the whole scene could be used as a major branching point. I could have been offered a choice to make my MC an asshole who goes along and thinks it's cute or, I could have been given the choice to make him a stand up guy and maybe even exact a bit of white knight retribution on behalf of a prospective LI. As it is written I'm expected to roll over and accept the MC as either a pussy or an idiot; depending on the reader's interpretation.
Sorry, m8, if you don't like it, but, it's called criticism and just because it's presented harshly does not make it invalid or unreasonable.
The kidnapping doesn't work as something to laugh off because Kayla was kidnapped too. If she wasn't it would be more understandable to laugh off but she was there and she's clearly traumatized by it so it makes the mc look bad for laughing it off instead of punching them in the face or leaving the party
jvbatman
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Pretty sure it's setting up what a dipshit Chloe's BF is so you can cuck him later.
motseer
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That works but, it shouldn't preclude kicking Rob's ass now...
I hope that's optional. I'm not into incest (neither is patreon so be careful). Unless she is a step sister.Yes
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It is what it is... Everyone's gonna have their own criticism .. We're either gonna hate it or love it.. But I'm just gonna let him tell the story.. And explore his imagination.. And who knows.. ♂ But It's not that deep to go up for debate lol definitely respect your answer
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Sure, but it isn't needed. A temporary stick-up for a short jolt of fear, upsetting the girl, would've been plenty, not to mention how many other little asshole moves could be hinted at if needed to bolster further. This level of abuse as a prank just makes the guy reach as a psycho and makes him less believable as a person and his gf less believable to be dating him in the first place.
BC
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Yeah and total agreement on the surprising lack of meaning to the kidnapping. I also expected it to be a big plot point.
It is difficult to place stops in a project like this because almost no stop is satisfying, but cocking a metaphoric gun before a break and then casually revealing it was a squirt gun held by a "friend" all along makes us feel lied to and says "there are no real stakes."
And even in games like this, we need some realistic stakes. I hope there isn't some huge conspiracy or plot MC gets involved with bc those are the least believable and often pale in comparison to the human relationships. Keep your stakes between characters. No offense, but no one is going to be playing this game to find out about a crime syndicate or government plot, etc.
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Dev, don't get discouraged by the reviews. The important thing is to do your best in what you have a passion for. It's impossible to please everyone. I know we have the habit of focusing on bad reviews, but focus on what you want. In my opinion, the game is on the right track. We know there's not much story and it's just an introduction. I'm sure you'll do a great job.