Since I like technicalities, what's the changelog between basic 1.0 version and the rest (mainly between v1.0 and v1.0c)?
@Lewdlab I think you need to change the context of Apparitions when they are interacting with other characters in the Dream World. Now, this is gonna be a wall of text but I think it would contribute to the story flow.
The way it is, when Main Character "casts" the spell on a girl, she enters a suggestible state where you give them tasks that get subliminally get carved into their minds and they do it (Marcus' mom not paying attention to MC while naked or MC groping mom in the patio when her eye color turns). But when MC "casts" the spell while they are sleeping and does something erotic with the girl, we see the dreamworld from the perspective of the girl that had the spell casted upon her.
Where am I getting with this?
As with the case of pulling Computer Password from your sister, MC casts the spell, she muffles and then gives you the password, when we see things from her "Dreamworld Perspective" the Apparition works as your extension.
When you put things into prespective...
1. Casted the spell and asked for the password.
2. Apparition played a game on the sister and forced her to reveal it.
3. She told the password to Apparition and to MC in the process.
The way I see it, and I know that this would require some effort diverted from the development of the next episode, you should make the Apparitions work that way from the very start.
First time you Cast the spell is on Mom:
- If you decide to unhook her bra, you get to play and finish on her breasts.
- If you "look at her ass" you play with the cheeks and finish on her back.
- If you do her feet, by the "flow" you finish on her feet and her back.
But, Dreamworld sequence is all the same. She is trapped on the ground, laying on her back, restrained, Apparition playing with her telling her to give in to the spell.
This should be changed in a way that Dreamworld reflects your actions in real world. With:
- first option, revolving around Apparition groping her breasts
- second having her restrained while laying on her front, Apparition playing with her butt
- third revolving around her feet.
Also, when she wakes up "from the nightmare" although you came all over her, there is no cum anywhere on her.
Using in consideration that she has already seen MC naked and held his "pride" in her hand, she is already a bit corrupted. There should be at least a glimpse sequence of her being surprised that she is a bit sticky...
Second time a spell is used on mom again. Situation is pretty much the same. Regardless of the path you take, Dreamworld sequence is the same and would work perfectly only if that particular one is used when you use third option. Other scenes should (have) be(en) developed reflecting the actions you do in "real time".
Also, I think that there should be a sequence where she, although adjusting and visibly aroused, should be curious about "bittersweet" taste in her mouth (maybe MC eats Pineapple for breakfast, dunno), cum on her face/chest/legs.
Third time: When spell is used on Latisha, there should be a Dreamworld scene with Apparition, opening her blouse saying something like "Oh, don't mind me, please..." and then Nick waking her up where she is completely ignorant to the fact that her breasts are in the open.
Without me explaining every scene over and over, I think you get the basic idea of what I am getting at. If you'd like more suggestions, feel free to drop a PM.
