Dylan741
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Well to partially justify Caribdis, OIAL was his first game, and he still was relaying heavily on the tropes of some japanese eroges and still refining his own skills as a writer, so the mC was bland in comparison to Orion.Yeah, OIALT's protagonist had, for me, a bit too much of the "shonen protagonist" syndrome. Dumber than others main characters (despite having his moments of clairvoyance), relies too much on "smart" characters (aka his sisters) and he's more powerful than anyone else without even knowing it and how to "activate" his powers. (I mean he clearly beats his father just because he's the main protagonist)
That's the reason I don't feel "attached" to him like I am with Orion.He has his own personnality, he thinks before acting (most the time) and grow up stonger update after update(and has a good lore behind his name too), characters development was what was missing primarly in OIALT.Caribdis did well not only with the LI but with the MC too and that's quite rare with AVN.
Eternum turned out in a Huge step by him in terms of writing (both the story and dialogues), and while kept some of the same patterns of OIAL it uses them way more efficiently and with a better balance in every aspects of the characters ( MC + girls) and on the story that the difference is striking.
For example we don't have a deus ex machina like Mike was ( which is a pity a little imho) or the girls to make the story go through, but we have a better mix of everything.
And considering this is only his second game, I would dare to say that his growth as an author was incredible ( an he can only improve).