VN Ren'Py Abandoned Exiles Lust Chapter 1 [v0.0.11] [FlipJoker]

[xmilteach]

Thx

 

[CUckumusprime547]

"Airplane Crush" ? lol

 

[MuffinManWantsPregnancy]

Sweet Mother, sweet Mother, send your child unto me, for the sins of the unworthy must be baptized in blood and fear.

Holy fuck, I am scared. That MC model is nightmare-inducing.

 

[Jash83]

Oh my god what happened to your faaaaaaaaace...?!

 

[FlipJoker]

Working on the next update, a list of better renders since am only using CPU. Hop this will be much better

 

[Mormont]

That looks a little better although the eyes seem to be a little dark?

 

[Ashenthorn]

At last, an incest that's not F/D, B/S or M/S.

See also: My Cute Cousin

 

[darth_hiruma]

See also: My Cute Cousin

I know. I played it. But it's a long time since then that I saw cousin/cousin.

 

[FlipJoker]

That looks a little better although the eyes seem to be a little dark?

Thank you but the eyes comes with the model, i tried changing but no luck

 

[FlipJoker]

Off to a good start. English is not your native language so you might want to get a proofreader. I could still understand the meaning just fine but others will bitch wine and complain as they have nothing else to do. The story is something new and I like that. all in all it was worth the download. I hope you continue this project and await an update. yes wine is spelled wrong but everyone got the meaning just fine.

Thank you so much for positive feedback, am working on the new update, will be fixing the renders and everything

 

[FlipJoker]

Uhm... I think the story needs some improvement to be a story.
It feels quite jumpy. Also, it would be better to get the time straight (when did he lose his fiance? A week, month, days?).
And what about the relationship? Jumps from cousin to sister to cousin.

And I suppose, with that short amount of time you lost your beloved, I guess you would have other things on your mind.
But for a fictionary story the progress should be faster but this fast? Hm...

You might want to work on some things to not deliver a flop. Enough pointers are there already.
But for a first try actually not that bad. Keep trying.

Thank you for the positive feedback, i believe i rushed on that story and you feedback made me think better, the next update will be much better❤

 

[Razzth]

Well, there are things you need to improve but they have already told you. The most important thing is that you are learning because it's not easy to create a game with all the elements that it has. All I will say is that you have to keep trying, try not to rush game releases, is better to release playable content than just a few minutes of gameplay. Good luck.

 

[FlipJoker]

Well, there are things you need to improve but they have already told you. The most important thing is that you are learning because it's not easy to create a game with all the elements that it has. All I will say is that you have to keep trying, try not to rush game releases, is better to release playable content than just a few minutes of gameplay. Good luck.

Thank you

 

[PeggyBlackett]

Yeah.

Looked at this.

Played it for a few minutes.

Deleted it.

Applied brain bleach.

 

[Vrijgeest]

Very rough. Get a proof reader please. The renders are, not to put a too finer point on it, horrendous. It went also with me straight into the waste bin.
Even the title does not make sense in English.

 

[BarbarrossaNA]

I've seen worse... Renders are on the margin and Engrish abounds. With that being said I've seen rougher demos turn into decent games. Continue on your path and rewarded you will be. perseverance my friend.. perseverance.

 

[Priappus]

since it has Voyeur the game is great,who wants to see blowjob,anal,doggystyle? no one

 

[MuffinManWantsPregnancy]

The renders look a bit better. Could still use a decent proofreader to clean up some of the grammar, but overall not too bad. It's incredibly short and ends abruptly and out of nowhere. I hope this doesn't end up being a peek-fest. When there aren't a lot of tags, but one of them is Voyeurism, they tend to scare me away. I hope the dev continues to learn and continues the game.

 

[macadam]

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Working on the next update, a list of better renders since am only using CPU. Hop this will be much better

imho, game renders aren't too bad. i dont mind face and stuff. the light is maybe a bit too high, almost no shadow. But its beginning.

but english..... hugh !

since it has Voyeur the game is great,who wants to see blowjob,anal,doggystyle? no one

you have to be voyeur to play the game.... cant play with eyes closed... chicken logic

 

[Hentai_Man]

Glad to see some people at least trying to encourage this guy rather than shitting on his first effort and then leaving. Hopefully he sticks with and gets better.

Anyone doing an Android version?