You know what? I agree with every point you make. But it just doesn’t land where you might think it’d land in my mind. This game’s writing (and everything else about it, honestly) isn’t really about the player. It’s about myself. And I think I’m being pretty honest and straightforward about it from the very first lines of text. I enjoy the privilege of staying myself while also appealing to a broader audience. If you don’t like it, it’s not your fault, but I also don’t consider it mine. You either take it and go with the flow or leave, both options equally as justified. I’m just gonna say one thing: the silliness I allow into my writing is one of the few things that keep you sane when you’re on your 200-something-th scene lol.
I played longer games, I don't feel threatened at all by the 200 scenes, but maybe if I started when it was finished and it's 300+ I would have been
Sorry for not replying earlier, I just tend to drop conversations because I don't like to argue
I would like to update my opinion though, the breaking of the fourth wall happened too much in the first 12 scenes or so (+ the intro) but I am now past 55 scenes and it rarely happens anymore and has been the case for a while, and when it does it's a harmless line.
I noticed that most of the newer girls after the first one I caught don't remember which honestly, had rarely any 4th wall breaks, but I was waiting to say for sure after playing a new main mission, and it's the same case too, I applaud you on that improvement early on.