I normally don't play first versions, but made an exception for this.
Straight out the gate, the writing is fine. Sets up some plot points to chase, things seem to be moving along. A lot of inner thoughts, but that's fine, it establishes the world and the MC. Characters are pretty good, I can hear their voices. Erika is the most intriguing of them all so far, but Melissa is my favorite. A lot of spelling and some continuity errors. I thought about listing them here, but I kind of ran out of quicksave slots at the end. There's at least 2 places where the wrong character is listed as saying a thing. Honestly just give the whole thing a replay, the errors are easy to notice. Also, when Melissa is drinking the wine with MC, you don't call a man "beautiful". Use "handsome" instead.
The MC is fine. Has his own personality, seems to be the kind of semi-shy introvert that you might expect from having grown up with different nannies and never having any huge issues to deal with on his own. The one time he did try to go on an adventure, he failed hard. Pretty hilarious for me, but I can see how that might dampen any hot headed tendencies he might have had. The house issue is also...fine. He has enough money and doesn't seem to value it all that much. It's not outside the established character to just give up the house. Just one thing to note, that is a pretty big milestone for the character. The traits that have been established now must be respected in the future releases, so don't make him suddenly into someone who really gives a shit about his retirement account and plans everything he does 20 steps ahead. Otherwise he will look like a schizo.
Renders are great. The ladies are lovely. Could use planned tags ITT. Overall I liked it, good start. Will wait to see where it goes.