This is pretty good. I'm really enjoying this game so far. I have found a few issues though:
There are a couple times it seemed like the MC knew things he shouldn't. The one I remember most clearly was him mentioning Serena by name (shortly before he notices the table with the rather suspicious crowd), when no one in the entire first chapter says her name out loud, as far as I can tell. Another was MC thinking something about Avis being annoyed at him for meddling, and her not wanting to be a damsel in distress. The way I navigated their first meeting, that didn't really come across, but maybe this is just me being bad at reading between the lines.
When Avis goes to look for her cat friend, if you decide not to follow her, you get teleported to her anyway, and she tells you to give her a minute. I believe the lines 3551-3563 (in the chapter 2 script) need to be indented 2 more steps.
The image "d1park22" is called twice in the script, but it's suppposed to be "d2park22". At least I assume so, based on it actually existing.
Finally, some random thoughts:
"I should get an alarm or something..." He said while looking at his alarm clock.
Also, damn, this MC is good at recognizing people. When he recognized "the girl from today", I only found out who she was by digging through the script. Turns out she's the girl who was leaning in the uni hallway that I didn't give a second glance. Go figure.