Alright, there's a lot to cover here. For starters, as others have mentioned, it's extremely rushed. There is a pretty good amount of story for a first release, but the pacing is way off. Even just throwing in a "one week later", or a short and simple montage, that shows some time passing between events would make it feel much less rushed.
The writing isn't the worst I've seen, but definitely needs a native English proofreader. Also, as was already mentioned, the vampire is entirely too fast and loose with the comically over-the-top violence. Keeping her identity a secret would be all but impossible.
There is also a gaping plot hole. Next part will only make sense if you've played the game. Heavy spoilers ahead, you've been warned. The vampire proves that the well can be used to wish for immortality. So why not just have MC wish that he and all the girls were truly immortal, then have any of them fall in love to break the curse. Game over, you win.
As for choices, there are a few, but they are mostly meaningless. Dev doesn't use any variables, so it's essentially a kinetic novel. No matter what you choose, nothing in the story changes, it only changes what you see. There is an early lewd scene that can be skipped/avoided, it's kind of both, because it doesn't set a variable, but so far, it's never mentioned after the fact, and if you choose to skip it, it really does seem like it never happened. The other choices are just between a couple alternate scenes. One of the choices lets you watch 1 of 2 rather important story scenes, while both really should have been shown sequentially, rather than one or the other. The choice, again, sets no variables, and a later discussion seems to assume MC was present for both scenes, even though, canonically, he was only able to be in one of them.
The MC starts out as a pretty average guy. He doesn't have much going for him, but he's not altogether unlikeable. He's braver than he should be, which is entertaining. There is a lot of room for him to develop into a real protagonist, and it seems that he's going to change quite drastically very soon.
Graphics are pretty bad, but could be worse. I personally love that all the girls are petite, with tiny boobs. All boobs deserve love, and I'm always happy to see a game that focuses on the smaller side. That said, one of the girls is a succubus, who rapes the MC in his sleep, several times. One of the times is avoidable, the other is interrupted, but not avoidable. She talks way too much about how slutty she is, which is a huge turnoff. Normally I don't mind that with succubus LIs, since it's in their nature, though I do appreciate that a lot of devs write virgin succubus LIs. But in this succubus' case, she chose to become a succubus, because, as she loves to tell everyone, she has always been a huge slut.
The main LI's backstory is that she was gang-raped, which for a lot of harem/vanilla fans makes her a ruined LI. MC's relationship with her is forced, and all of her lewd scenes are unskippable and unavoidable. She is also extremely jealous, and repeatedly employs over-the-top violence on any girl that gets near MC, including the other LIs. I'm actually a bit morbidly curious about how the harem will eventually form, given the main LI's behavior.
Overall, the game is pretty mediocre, at best. However, as long as you don't take it too seriously, it's a pretty fun story, and the cliffhanger ending to episode 1 has me wanting to see what comes next.
The writing isn't the worst I've seen, but definitely needs a native English proofreader. Also, as was already mentioned, the vampire is entirely too fast and loose with the comically over-the-top violence. Keeping her identity a secret would be all but impossible.
There is also a gaping plot hole. Next part will only make sense if you've played the game. Heavy spoilers ahead, you've been warned. The vampire proves that the well can be used to wish for immortality. So why not just have MC wish that he and all the girls were truly immortal, then have any of them fall in love to break the curse. Game over, you win.
As for choices, there are a few, but they are mostly meaningless. Dev doesn't use any variables, so it's essentially a kinetic novel. No matter what you choose, nothing in the story changes, it only changes what you see. There is an early lewd scene that can be skipped/avoided, it's kind of both, because it doesn't set a variable, but so far, it's never mentioned after the fact, and if you choose to skip it, it really does seem like it never happened. The other choices are just between a couple alternate scenes. One of the choices lets you watch 1 of 2 rather important story scenes, while both really should have been shown sequentially, rather than one or the other. The choice, again, sets no variables, and a later discussion seems to assume MC was present for both scenes, even though, canonically, he was only able to be in one of them.
The MC starts out as a pretty average guy. He doesn't have much going for him, but he's not altogether unlikeable. He's braver than he should be, which is entertaining. There is a lot of room for him to develop into a real protagonist, and it seems that he's going to change quite drastically very soon.
Graphics are pretty bad, but could be worse. I personally love that all the girls are petite, with tiny boobs. All boobs deserve love, and I'm always happy to see a game that focuses on the smaller side. That said, one of the girls is a succubus, who rapes the MC in his sleep, several times. One of the times is avoidable, the other is interrupted, but not avoidable. She talks way too much about how slutty she is, which is a huge turnoff. Normally I don't mind that with succubus LIs, since it's in their nature, though I do appreciate that a lot of devs write virgin succubus LIs. But in this succubus' case, she chose to become a succubus, because, as she loves to tell everyone, she has always been a huge slut.
The main LI's backstory is that she was gang-raped, which for a lot of harem/vanilla fans makes her a ruined LI. MC's relationship with her is forced, and all of her lewd scenes are unskippable and unavoidable. She is also extremely jealous, and repeatedly employs over-the-top violence on any girl that gets near MC, including the other LIs. I'm actually a bit morbidly curious about how the harem will eventually form, given the main LI's behavior.
Overall, the game is pretty mediocre, at best. However, as long as you don't take it too seriously, it's a pretty fun story, and the cliffhanger ending to episode 1 has me wanting to see what comes next.
