katabasi
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Eroguri, early thoughts. Don't capitalize the relationships always. "...why don't you help your Roommate unpack..." is incorrect. Roommate should not be capitalized here. If Alissa was talking to the MC and said, "Roommate, come with me." this capitalization would be correct, because roommate in this context is the name she is addressing him with. (This also works to make anything you change the relationships to make more sense as well)
Also, I have seen this before recently, but there is quite a few incorrect usages of apostrophes. I don't know if there is a translator that is common that causes this, but it is weird that I see it often in these AVNs.
Not sure about the switch to Blender mid way through. Character's faces look like their lighting doesn't match the scenes now.
Also, I have seen this before recently, but there is quite a few incorrect usages of apostrophes. I don't know if there is a translator that is common that causes this, but it is weird that I see it often in these AVNs.
Not sure about the switch to Blender mid way through. Character's faces look like their lighting doesn't match the scenes now.
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BladeSSR
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Don't even mention it, at first glance it looks like a lesbian or futa game. Lmao
I'd suggest you get a grammar editor. 'Your' instead of 'you're', alot (not a word, just as alittle and abit are not words), and confusion of its and it's. It grates on the nerves. Easy to fix.
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Adding on to this, you can add modifiers to your variables to change capitalization so that they fit better in sentences. For example, changing [AnnaRelations] to [AnnaRelations!l] will make it all lowercase, !c will capitalize the first letter, and !u will make it all uppercase (which is useful if the character is yelling).Thanks for your feedback! We'll work on making improvements in the future.
Also, a small thing I noticed that might get missed during a future proofread/edit of the script (considering the comments about spelling/grammar): the line near the start "Writhe with characters..."etc. still makes sense, but I get the feeling this is supposed to be "Rife with characters".
irezawa
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This.
I had to go back and retype my relationship choices to have them properly capitalized. Speaking of relationships, Eroguri, you're missing a shorthand or term of endearment for the landlady – not all tenants call their landlady 'landlady' all the time. Circling back to capitalization, though; it's all over the place:
Python:
# script.rpy
219: MCt "(5 months since mia..)" # Mia
# v1.rpy
17: "Not exactly how You dreamed your life would end up. A 21, Jobless, college dropout, Living with # you, jobless, livingOh, an maybe redo the render of him and Alissa going up the stairs? No sane person would take the corner like that.
Before finding Mia you need to find the Anchor Camera setting, fucking hell... I've seen sailors swaying less than that.
