You should probably get someone to proofread the writing. There's lots of mistakes and syntax errors, such as missing points.
I'd also advise you to remove the AI-written introduction at the start of the game. It's vague, nebulous, doesn't do anything to create interest or anything and just makes people hyper-conscious of AI usage. There's no benefit to it. It's not well-written, but it's clearly different enough from the other writing for someone like me to easily spot that it was AI written.
No need to "buffer" your story with it, just jump straight into it.
I'd also advise you to remove the AI-written introduction at the start of the game. It's vague, nebulous, doesn't do anything to create interest or anything and just makes people hyper-conscious of AI usage. There's no benefit to it. It's not well-written, but it's clearly different enough from the other writing for someone like me to easily spot that it was AI written.
No need to "buffer" your story with it, just jump straight into it.
