Well, is more like pilot episode from a tv show. I put preview scenes about the type of fetishes that are plan for the future
Thank you!!! It's always fun to read yours comments. I'm hype for seeing what will be your reaction, when I post a new game or update
The protagonist is male, although he is very slim and short with long hair. That maybe your confusion. And he is moving to the bully's mother house.
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Problaly the best feedback I have in my career as Gamedev. Thank you soo much!Obviously I don't know your plan or what your final script looks like, but I honestly think it could use a little restructuring in the beginning. I get that you wanted to blow your load right off the bat and reveal to the player "Hey! Lucia is a murder accomplice"(along with the sneak peek in the future of this game). But that choice deflated any potential story-drama-tension you had in us finding out that "mystery." And along with that deflates any interest in potential supporters- you need that HOOK.
Or you can take what I say with a grain of salt.
My suggestion, start the story with the kid walking up the door, gives his little narration of his tragic past couple of days have been. Describe the Lucia and her family, how both her son and father are assholes, yet Lucia is a nice and warm presence in his life at school. But when he enters the house, it's the complete opposite. Lucia is cold and avoidant, while Kenta is the one being all nice and approachable. Player will be likethat's not what I was expecting, what are they hiding?...I'm sure you see where I'm going with this.
On a technical level, I think you just gotta be consistent on the "who's who" when talking and putting their name on top of the dialogue. I see you started it, then just gave up halfway through. You can either be consistent with the naming, or just drop it all together.
Yep! I want people to be hook since the beginning. So, I put the reveal of Lucia and how she will manage the situation. Also, the drama-tension was about the relationship between Lucia and Yuichi (protagonists) and how they have an almost normal relationship, but there is that secret that she knows, want to tell him, but she can't. And as a player you see both POV, Lucia and Yuichi, and it wouldn't make much sense to not say why she is guilty when you read Lucia's POV
Anyway, you are right about many points and I taking note
So, I'm plan to restructure the story-plot and make a reworked of the pilot... before Episode 1!!!!
Don't worry. I'll try to improve my art as much as possible or save some money to pay an 2D artist.
Is netori focus. Only the protag having sex and "stealing" the bully's family
But I may add the Bully and the father's bully POV, and in that case it may have a little of netorare from their bully's perspective
is the closest tag in this site. And cheating is not really the same becuse netori is "stealing" the whole relationship and cheating is just sex
Yep! is the closest in this site. Although I may add the bully and the bully's father POV and how they get a taste of their own medicine. That POV will be netorare, but will have a netori feeling overall
Is not really the same. Cheating is just sex with others, but not necessary to "steal" the relationship or make any change on the characters.
Netori is mostly about "stealing" the whole realtionship from a SO (significan Other) is kind of like a love triangle. But more fucked up.
While netori have a lot of cheating, the cheating may not have netori
Netori is more like a subgenere of drama/romance
and cheating is the act of infidelity
This is kind of like the difference between thriller and horror
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