Game lags like a mother fucker... that's the most pressing issue. Some typos, bugs, etc. but its just a demo.
The writing could use some work. Some serious shit is going down and the characters are all surprisingly nonchalant about it. It feels like they are just acting out what the appropriate emotional response would be in those situations. There is an effort to show the personalities and desires of each character, and they do succeed somewhat. However, the characters come off as caricatures because the dialogue is stiff and the scenes play out kind of mechanically.
That said, I really do like the concept of the game and the planned character arcs for each character that was revealed in the original thread.