VN Ren'Py Completed Game of Hearts [Ch.5 R2] [SparkHG]

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OdinTGE

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Just started this. First impressions are that I'm blown away by the technical aspects of the visuals, but very disappointed by the first two women we see. They're just not attractive to me at all.

There are also a pretty consistent language issues. I assume the dev is not a native English speaker. It's not egregious. The biggest issue is switching between past/present/future tense. There are quite a few word choices that don't really work, and some that are just wrong. I've seen much worse, but it needs to be edited by a native speaker.

I just got past the first Meredith scene. The language issues get much worse during the conversation with Julia. I may put this one on hold for now, and hope it gets an editor.
 
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sac812

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Alternate20 said:
There are also a pretty consistent language issues. I assume the dev is not a native English speaker. It's not egregious. The biggest issue is switching between past/present/future tense. There are quite a few word choices that don't really work, and some that are just wrong. I've seen much worse, but it needs to be edited by a native speaker.

I just got past the first Meredith scene. The language issues get much worse during the conversation with Julia. I may put this one on hold for now, and hope it gets an editor.
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It already has one (unofficially). :)

I edited the full game scripts as of the latest update and posted them here.
 
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OdinTGE

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sac812 said:
It already has one (unofficially). :)

I edited the full game scripts as of the latest update and posted them here.
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Well, I'll give it a shot. Using this precludes use of the walkthrough mod which is a bit annoying, but having fixed dialog is better.

I appreciate the effort. I've done a bit of volunteer editing myself, and I know how quickly "Well, I'll just fix this up a bit" turns into "My god, how many pages are in this google doc of changes?"

Edit: Having played a while with your changes, it's a massive improvement. However, I really prefer to play with the walkthrough. I tried just having the script up on another monitor so I could see the stat changes but it's too much hassle. I'll just put this one on hold for now.
 
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Oliman13

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I've got to say this is a great game, really enjoyed everything about it. The story, renders and all the characters are really interesting. I think all the women are stunning in the game, love it that the two girls you are corrupting/corrupted dont look like the typical women in these sorts of games. More mature and womanly which is right up my alley
 
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hysepReC said:
I always saw this game as the spiritual successor to Chains of Pleasure. The initial set-ups were similar and there's a focus on slowly corrupting and stealing another man's wife. If you take away the wife stealing aspect, what do you have left? The game is already quite tame. Meredith's arc is what made this stand out and I think it would be a massive waste of potential if it turns into yet another generic vanilla harem...
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Chains of pleasure was also supposed to have an update in feb that year, and then the dev suddenly disappeared. I just hope that I'm wrong on this feeling of deja vu
 
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OdinTGE

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dean_athallah said:
How is this game only $1470/mo in support ??? Dev needs to do a better job at marketing....
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1) Two of the three women in the banner are not traditional AVN hotties.
2) Non-native English writing can turn people away.

Many people will instantly bounce off the game from the banner alone, and many of those that make it past that will be frustrated by the writing hiccups and give up shortly after starting.
 
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He posted an update on patreon Beta coming in the next couple of week. So to all the people saying he abandoned it.
Sadly you were wrong
 
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