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I will say, nice little introduction to the game. Think the redhead is my fav of the characters. And very interested in seeing how this goes.

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However, looking forward for more. Thank you so very much for this.
 
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Thanks for the answer, so If I understand correctly then Femdom is forced?
(If that is the case, it would be good if you put that in the overview in a Spoiler or in "Dev notes", you save yourself having to answer the same thing several times)
If you always take the dominant option for John he will be on top, however there will be FF scene where one will dominate the other.

Interesting concept for a game I can't wait to try it, I assume there is no cheating on the MC(John) I think it better to write that there will be no NTR under the overview to avoid NTR discussion.
Thanks and good luck dev.
I don't think it goes into NTR, it's more like open relationships. I'm not sure how sensitive people are about that :/
 

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I don't think it goes into NTR, it's more like open relationships. I'm not sure how sensitive people are about that :/
It's great so far! I understand you at the open relationship part but sometimes people considered FF scenes behind MC's back as ntr. But since this game making decisions for multiple MC so I guess they can't complain. ;)
Be careful not to have too many branches throughout the plot though.... Having to make decisions for 4 characters, insane work load if the branches go ham.
 

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Very few games make me bust out laughing this game is one of them. The scene where somebody knocks on the door and Kate was like really. lmao
 
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Few random(ish) thoughts:

Kate saying 'husband' sounds imo unnatural; it's ok when she's angered, but at some moments, like the first scene, it's weird and doesn't sound like a real conversation.

Since we can change characters names it would be good if the choices we click on would refer to the characters by the names we've given them. In the flashback MC also uses his default name.

I think Kate may be an alcoholic.

I played without the incest patch, and Rachel still calls MC and Kate mommy and daddy in her thoughts.

I think it's really weird that MC's first thought after Rachel seeing him naked was 'I can't wait to show her more'. I mean she's his daughter with the patch (and I assume that is the 'canon' story), but even without the patch he's too much into it given she's just 19. That would be good on some corruption route, but imo not in general one if we're to like the guy; I'd make some of his reactions left for the player to choose.

And I'd choose a better moment to end the current version tbh.

There are some typos too and occasional grammar mistake.

In general tho I liked the game, looks fun, I enjoyed the dynamics between the characters and I'm curious about possible choices and how far various routes will go. I do hope that there're going to be a very different routes depending on who's where on the D/s ladder. I'll be def back for more. Good luck!
 
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Few random(ish) thoughts:

Kate saying 'husband' sounds imo unnatural; it's ok when she's angered, but at some moments, like the first scene, it's weird and doesn't sound like a real conversation.

Since we can change characters names it would be good if the choices we click on would refer to the characters by the names we've given them. In the flashback MC also uses his default name.

I think Kate may be an alcoholic.

I played without the incest patch, and Rachel still calls MC and Kate mommy and daddy in her thoughts.

I think it's really weird that MC's first thought after Rachel seeing him naked was 'I can't wait to show her more'. I mean she's his daughter with the patch (and I assume that is the 'canon' story), but even without the patch he's too much into it given she's just 19. That would be good on some corruption route, but imo not in general one if we're to like the guy; I'd make some of his reactions left for the player to choose.

And I'd choose a better moment to end the current version tbh.

There are some typos too and occasional grammar mistake.

In general tho I liked the game, looks fun, I enjoyed the dynamics between the characters and I'm curious about possible choices and how far various routes will go. I do hope that there're going to be a very different routes depending on who's where on the D/s ladder. I'll be def back for more. Good luck!
Actually my wife and I call each other "husband" and "wife" and that's where the idea is from. Using names usually happens when we are pissed and/or angry.

For the name change I'll look into it, thanks.

If it were real life, yes Kate would be an alcoholic, but in the scope of the game we thought it was funny. Obviously we are taking feedback into account and if players don't like it we are open to changing it.

Of course the story was written with incest and at the end I went back and replaced some text, I accidentally went over that one, sorry and thanks for notifying us.

Even if John is interested in bringing some sex into Rachel's life, I promise it will all be done respectfully.

I personally thought ending on the hate relationship between Kate and Lexie to be a good point. I can't really promise to choose a better ending the next time but if you tell me why you don't approve I will take that under consideration. Also sorry if the grammar mistakes of my second language cause you problem I am not perfect and will continue to make mistakes. I am open to know what they are so I can correct them later.
 
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Actually my wife and I call each other "husband" and "wife" and that's where the idea is from. Using names usually happens when we are pissed and/or angry.
Hmm, maybe some context then would help (short thought "We usually/always call each other this way, since..."), or smth like "Nice to see you again... husband" in a certain setting. It just seemed to me like lines from some cheap soap opera or smth similar where they add expository dialogues in order to (unorganically) present the relationships between the characters.

For the name change I'll look into it, thanks.
Sure. And in general, I didn't write all of that to criticize your game. I sincerely hope that my feedback can be useful to you in order to make the game better.

If it were real life, yes Kate would be an alcoholic, but in the scope of the game we thought it was funny. Obviously we are taking feedback into account and if players don't like it we are open to changing it.
We meet her in the morning drinking, then she takes her husband to bedroom (which I found slightly weird: they have a new person at home that they don't know at all and don't know if they can trust her and first thing they do is they leave her unchecked at their mansion), drinks some more, and then goes to sleep, when it's still early saying that alcohol will help, thus suggesting - in the context of her actions hitherto - she has experience with using alcohol this way. Then next day she drinks again.

Also, MC says it's early, but next thing we see is all of the characters going to sleep one by one. Better accentuating the time progression could be a good idea for general pacing.

Even if John is interested in bringing some sex into Rachel's life, I promise it will all be done respectfully.
I just think he's too horny for his own daughter, makes him kinda creepy imo. I don't mean that incest or him being eager to corrupt innocents shouldn't be in the game (it is a porn game after all), but imo it should be a player's choice. It'd require more work on the game, but I think it'll be better in the long run and may help in attracting bigger audience.

Personally I play without a patch so this daddy, mommy talk wasn't something I wanted to see.

I personally thought ending on the hate relationship between Kate and Lexie to be a good point.
I think it's too early to call it relationship, and I didn't feel Kate hates Lexie as more feels angered by her presence and maybe somewhat threatened (I hope for separate routes with Lexie domming Kate and vice versa btw :) ).

The way the game ended seemed very abrupt to me: let's sit and talk, and then sudden end. I honestly think you could add the conversation into the 1st release as it's a good idea imo to make a good, fairly juicy first release to make a solid 1st impression. They could talk, and then go about their personal businesses and - idk - leave the room using different doors while we would stay in the empty room and the "save your game here" note would pop up. Just a first thought that came to my mind.

Also sorry if the grammar mistakes of my second language cause you problem I am not perfect and will continue to make mistakes. I am open to know what they are so I can correct them later.
English is not my 1st language either and I also make mistakes (and folks who know it as a 1st language aren't always perfect either), so it's nothing extremely bad, tho it helps for the good reception of the game when its language is polished. I'd suggest - if you can't afford a proofreader - pasting your texts into google docs, their checker will automatically catch a lot of mistakes, it's a pretty solid tool. From the top of my head I remember that you used incorrect forms of verbs in the past tense (you used 'did' and a verb in the past tense at the same time), and the word "his" iirc appeared where it shouldn't at least twice I believe. But yeah, paste it into docs and see what it'll tell you.
 
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Hmm, maybe some context then would help (short thought "We usually/always call each other this way, since..."), or smth like "Nice to see you again... husband" in a certain setting. It just seemed to me like lines from some cheap soap opera or smth similar where they add expository dialogues in order to (unorganically) present the relationships between the characters.


Sure. And in general, I didn't write all of that to criticize your game. I sincerely hope that my feedback can be useful to you in order to make the game better.


We meet her in the morning drinking, then she takes her husband to bedroom (which I found slightly weird: they have a new person at home that they don't know at all and don't know if they can trust her and first thing they do is they leave her unchecked at their mansion), drinks some more, and then goes to sleep, when it's still early saying that alcohol will help, thus suggesting - in the context of her actions hitherto - she has experience with using alcohol this way. Then next day she drinks again.

Also, MC says it's early, but next thing we see is all of the characters going to sleep one by one. Better accentuating the time progression could be a good idea for general pacing.


I just think he's too horny for his own daughter, makes him kinda creepy imo. I don't mean that incest or him being eager to corrupt innocents shouldn't be in the game (it is a porn game after all), but imo it should be a player's choice. It'd require more work on the game, but I think it'll be better in the long run and may help in attracting bigger audience.

Personally I play without a patch so this daddy, mommy talk wasn't something I wanted to see.


I think it's too early to call it relationship, and I didn't feel Kate hates Lexie as more feels angered by her presence and maybe somewhat threatened (I hope for separate routes with Lexie domming Kate and vice versa btw :) ).

The way the game ended seemed very abrupt to me: let's sit and talk, and then sudden end. I honestly think you could add the conversation into the 1st release as it's a good idea imo to make a good, fairly juicy first release to make a solid 1st impression. They could talk, and then go about their personal businesses and - idk - leave the room using different doors while we would stay in the empty room and the "save your game here" note would pop up. Just a first thought that came to my mind.


English is not my 1st language either and I also make mistakes (and folks who know it as a 1st language aren't always perfect either), so it's nothing extremely bad, tho it helps for the good reception of the game when its language is polished. I'd suggest - if you can't afford a proofreader - pasting your texts into google docs, their checker will automatically catch a lot of mistakes, it's a pretty solid tool. From the top of my head I remember that you used incorrect forms of verbs in the past tense (you used 'did' and a verb in the past tense at the same time), and the word "his" iirc appeared where it shouldn't at least twice I believe. But yeah, paste it into docs and see what it'll tell you.
I think I came across as a bit passive-aggressive in my reply and I apologize. I always take feedback and I accept criticism as long as no one is being rude. I have noted you feedback and will do my best to take it into account in the future. I have already talked with my partner about changes that we should make in the first chapters thanks to you. I will also be more careful with my english. I did appreciate the time you you put into your feedback, and I thank you.
 
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