I'm going to assume you're being genuine. Fit black dudes are considered a staple of NTR/hard NTR.(if I recall properly these are like the only other men in my playthrough) So them being in that scene could only illicit suspicion from me. Also this isn't a criticism it's more pointing out how your comedy ruined my experience.
The bathroom scene says otherwise. The LI literally masturbates to/after being naked with that other LI.
No. In that case your womanly charms(writing) is adequate for people who think anime women being rude is hot. That is until it happens IRL i.e women being rude to them and they rage incessantly.
As for my sense of humor, it's the key element of the game. The thing is, even the people who find it cringe end up loving it — unfortunately, I know that's how it is.
If I didn’t want to put something of
myself into the game, I would’ve just opened a Patreon where I generate AI images of already existing characters and be both rich and at peace.
As for how the story develops, there’s really nothing going on except for a bit of "infatuation/adulation" from Madame toward Speranza — OBVIOUSLY not reciprocated — and which gradually shifts more and more toward the protagonist. As far as I'm concerned, that’s not NTR, especially since there was basically no kind of romantic interaction with the protagonist. And even if it was, the reaction still feels a bit over the top.
I tried to include almost every type of personality — from tsundere, to yandere, to the mommy type, to the super energetic tomboy. I’ve gotten a lot of feedback on Discord and Itch.io. Some girls are liked more than others, but I think that’s how it should be.
And regarding the writing style and characters — I’m not a writer. My only real exposure to "love stories" is from harem anime like
Toradora and
Zero no Tsukaima, where the whole tsundere model literally took shape — and
Desperate Housewives, man I love that trashy Latin-style drama narration.
I get your point, but it's just a game — a story with zero depth, filled with gags that some people like and others don't.
It's all a matter of taste, but I'm fully aware that my kind of humor and the way I write the girls' personalities might not appeal to everyone.