The camera angle change all the time is annoying then it's slantet a bit then it straight, why waste time on rendering that? just do one frame do the text for that frame, the frame does need to change all the time when it's the same content just with a different angle.
And i think you need to sit down and look in to over exposure, because a lot of the images are blown out, where there is way to much light.
I like the story butlike others mention, to little content for at update, to quick to go through, and read through, i know you prop got a job on the side, but i think you need to put some TLC in to your title, else ends up as a title people ignorer.