There's some really good points here so I'll try to address all of them.
While I like the over all idea, there are two things that are bugging me. I tend to be a bit on the harsher side (I let others focus on the stuff done well). Skip down to the bugs if you have trouble with harsher critiquing.
Harsh true facts are for the most part the most accurate ones so I'm ok with them as they help me improve the game.
The minor thing. While the grammar is fine, the writing's kinda off. Bluntly put, it feels like you're trying to imitate the issues that go along with a game being translated from Japanese to English. It's more off-putting than charming, feels like a failed attempt to try to put in a pseudo-Japanese feel (maybe japanophiles would enjoy that, but I think that mostly ended 5-10 years ago). It's not something that'd make me stop playing, but it detracts.
Yeah I can definitely see myself doing that, most games I've played have been Japanese so I must be unconsciously writing all the dialogue in a way that resembles those Japanese games.
This is my first time writing dialogue and stuff so I'm not a pro at writing by any means. I'm hoping to improve my writing skills overtime and eventually rewrite some dialogues in a way that they don't seem off.
Really appreciate you pointing it out though, that way I can focus more on it!
The major thing. Her breast size is all over the place, both on sprites and in pictures. It runs the full range from flat/A-cup, to D-cup (you can get the full range in the bar). Personally I think she looks best in the pictues that have here around a B-cup, but just pick a size and stick with it. The random breast growth/shrinkage either needs an explination, or needs to be resolved.
Yeah back when the bar's CGs were made I was still figuring it out hence the different breast sizes.
On another note, the priority is to have the CGs have their appeal so sometimes due to certain angles and such we tend to make Hana's breasts a tab bit bigger. still, the ones in the bar are all over the place and they will be adjusted for 0.3 to resemble the CGs in the bathhouse which have a more consistent breast size.
Possible bug: Bar - wage goes up to 35 the second time she works there, drops down to 25 again after
Yeah Hana's wage increases per level but her wage going back from 35 to 25 is a bug (it did give you the proper amount of silver but the dialogue didn't reflect it).
I just fixed it so thanks for pointing it out!
Bug: Bathhouse - Wasn't able to get the bathing stuff to happen. For replication purposes, upon unlocking the bathhouse, she spoke with the attendant, she accepted the job, she 'spoke' with all the npc's in the room (went counter-clockwise), she worked (heart icon), she got paid, she spoke with the the attendant again (intro speech again). Exiting and re-entering the bathhouse didn't change anything, neither did using the inn. Maybe I just missed something, but repeating the intro speech seems like a bug regardless.
That's a bug but I can't seem to be able to replicate it, here's what I did:
Entered the bathhouse, talked to the attendant, started working, talked to the NPCs (which shouldn't affect in any way), triggered the event, got paid and then talked to the attendant again.
I did that and the dialogue had properly changed to the attendant offering Hana to use the bathhouse instead of the dialogue you get when talking to him for the first time, am I missing a step?
Alright that's all of it, there were a lot of thing here which will help me improve the game so I really appreciate all the feedback!