It's too early to judge the story and how it will develop, I like the characters and the attention to detail. But...
First let's talk about the mini-games.
Most of us are here to see a story that excites us more than watching porn on the "add name" tube.
You introduce us to some characters and our brains, in parallel with what you tell us and the images that accompany the story and aided by our own imaginations, begin to anticipate and build the arousal necessary to get an boner.
If you interrupt this process with a mini-game that doesn't contribute anything to creating arousal and give our brains something else to do, all the sexual tension disappears. Annoying, because we have to start all over again.
A mini-game can be fun, but we are not here for that kind of fun.
Many of us are mature adults, with more or not so much sexual experience, with enough other life issues on our minds, and some of us with little time on our hands, we don't get an erection at the mere sight of boobs like we did at 15.
You're a one-man army. For starters, you can't afford to spend money and time on unnecessary details and unnecessary games, even if you think they improve the story, money and time you could use delivering content faster to attract sponsors. Not a fuck-fest or a rushed story, but at least each episode throws us a bone to keep us paying attention and wanting more.
An update every 4-5 months with very little sexual content won't attract sponsors, there are enough willing to pay if the story satisfies them, but they have expectations and want to jerk off now when they see your story, not 2-3 updates next year.
And anyway the game will come out for free, no point in paying for a year for too little, wait until it has enough content.
Of the planned tags you have at least 10 that are optional. I don't know much about coding or Ren`Ppy, but I'm guessing that's at least double the amount of work and render time. And that's at least 10 LIs...
If in 8 months of work you've produced 2 updaters with approx. 2 hours of content, how do you think you'll do when the story gets complicated and you have to produce 2 versions of it?
I write too, and every time I get carried away, start to complicate things and get stuck, I remind myself of a rule that, in my case, has always worked. KISS! Keep it simple, stupid!
And another thing, very important and somewhat difficult to do. A character in a movie says, in a different context but valid here and approximating the translation: "The outstretched hand that begs without telling a (good)story, doesn't get any alms."
Good luck!
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