Sure sounds good to me. But I thought there might be a prehistory that goes a little deeper, I would deepen the whole story and divide it up like you do in thrillers and dramas.
If you only have Ellen telling something now, the whole thing seems like, how am I supposed to say that: "Boring". That's why I had suggested that you split it up and for example the other characters in the discovery of the prehistory (legend) of Harem Hotel. But as I said, I leave that to you.
Well, that was just a fixed idea to justify the "success" with the main character with the women.
Honestly to offer that as a reason is abundant ... *PIEP*. Honestly, I mean it's a story (an erotic story) but don't you think it's a bit flat? So the character doesn't exactly look like a Womanizer. Story Technically he likes to say the right things and the girls might be attracted to him but don't you think that there is no girl who would just tolerate it all? So this part of the story I would definitely reconsider.
Therefore I came at least from the logical view on another solution .. how one can read ideas technically in my preceding post.
Hmm, okay. Superficially I only say OK. But still nothing is explained. Nice that there are the androids and that they are considered as a substitute for elves because they can do more and also longer but well... I find it a bit flat. I miss the reason why this model of Android is in this hotel. Why this model carries this AI in herself and behaves like this. I lack the whole structure concerning this character.
As I said before, even if it was considered a gift, I lack the structure of the character.
Oh and these are the reasons why there must be no competition? Both in the Android workshop and in the hotel industry? Really now?
So I think these are the reasons why someone has to expect competition. Money rules the world. It doesn't matter if it's about androids, if it's cheap, if it comes from the elves or if it's a hotel. There are always envious people who want to try to make as much profit as possible. Just that is also a good 2 hanger for a game. To captivate the players with a next to main story. There would fit again the bar girl well and/or the sister and much more. Furthermore you can hide the main story if it's not very good. To build up suspense this is especially well suited in the interaction with the grandfather, the story of the hotel etc. and also makes for some logic. After all, everything has to be paid for, money also plays a role.
I designed this side story as an example! Nothing more than an example how to further invent the already existing stories.
Anyway, even if Lucia was still a virgin, that doesn't mean that your father couldn't have a relationship... There is still oral and anal and much more without losing virginity.
Besides, the father is gone now that doesn't mean that the father is always gone. The father to Kali, right at the beginning of the story, that she must stay another year in the hotel, so the contact must still exist.
Just to spin that once more: Just because they haven't told the dark side of their lives yet doesn't mean they don't exist.
That was now an example of how you could tell the story of Kali and Lucia and get a new turning point in and build tension.
In every good story there are turning points... The order for movies and novels and games is the same:
Start -> Introduction and announcement of the first characters
Structure -> The first structure of the story is built.
1st turning point -> An event that influences the story. For example something happens and the main character goes on his journey.
2nd turning point -> Often an event that influences history and thus completely rebuilds it. For example someone dies or something happens or someone tells something. From enemy becomes friend from friend becomes enemy.
3. finale announces itself -> danger of life. Held manages to fulfill his mission. (But is it also fulfilled?) Is something still possible happening? Is someone still dying?
4. end hero returns home or? End?
This quite quite quite rough structure applies to all stories.
In my opinion you are just at the 2nd turning point.
As I said, I don't want to tell you anything or anything ... I just want to help you that everything makes more sense.
That's why my example also applies to all other characters. Can't you do something about the story? Like I said, I write stories.
Just to say that again clearly .. I try not to force anything on you I just try to give the whole something more story, more depth and not only superficial fuck around.
Shoulder shrug. OK I leave it at that for now. I think you already understand so approximately what I mean.
