Strike-10
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Looks like you have a good start to the development of your very own game.every person in this story could benefit from a new personality archetype
Lin, being the oldest, could gain more coordination, more awareness of herself as the most mature person invoved, the 'adult,' at least inside the Hotel and among the group. Id like to see her dress in larger clothing, along with a larger personality.
Kali could lose a little of the geeky awkwardness, and either shift towards a calm businesswoman personality, or a affectionate seductress
Yandzilla could plan for motherhood maturely, rather than with frantic neediness
Maria could either embrace the idea of being the property of someone she trusts, or become a gentle supporter of fleeing and displaced elves and others who are rejected
Android I'm not sure, perhaps something related to real world permanence, since discovering mortality is very odd for a machine, or perhaps a secret steward of emerging intelligences. Maybe this is too serious for her, and she just needs a cute hobby that she takes far too seriously.
F+E I can't see them doing anything except getting serious about petplay. Perhaps a clothing business, but eventually maturing into hotel management
Churchlady is still developing narratively, so I'm not sure, but I actually think politics would suit her better than religion.
Let us know when you get it done!
I get that HH isn’t quite up to your expectations… however … If I was in your shoes I would have framed my comments differently.
maybe list a few things that you enjoyed or that you think are done well vs a list of things that you think need changing and that could have been summed up under a heading of …
“This is how you screwed up your characters and your 4+ years of work has minimal value.”
Just a thought.
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