Alright, finished the new update. Nice character development for Alicia and nice new scenes.
As usual, here are a few typos I noticed:
1)
"then" should be "than"
2)
The comma shoudl eb after "wife" and before "they".
3)
"her" should be "here"
4)
"site" should be "sight" (same in the repeat scene)
5)
"Fcuk" should be "Fuck"
6)
Missing comma after "God".
7)
"it's" should be "its"
8)
- Alicia's "everything I got" should be "everything I've got"
- for Lily's line right after, I think "here" should be "there"
9)
Missing comma after "first". Noticed this during the repeat scene.
And that's all, folks!