VN Ren'Py Healslut [v0.99f3] [Davie Zwei]

[popober]

You dont play as a trap, you play as a female since its a gender bend game :O

That was for a different game, not this one.

 

[Darkarhon]

oh ok.

 

[BruceLee73]

Wow. just wow.
I am pleasantly surprised and definetly hooked.

Its a fun idea and I love the dev actually comes here to ask for suggestions.

I d like to share some too. Lets pretend I was the dev and had the skills to make such a game of my own -what would I change?

- We havent seen a lot of chars yet, but except for the guy in the ally all men look kinda like 13 year old weaklings.
at the same time the female characters mostly show a lot tougher looks.
Nothing against strong or capable fem chars, but there is no need to make "men" look like a blade of grass.
And who submits to a weakling really?

- Start doing dirty things.
The game is well written so far but as mentioned by others, when it comes to that one "dirty" moment I feel like we missed something important on two levels here: a) be desperate enough to do it and b) how mc feels/thinks WHILE doing it.
from my perspective this part is not in line with the well written parts before and after.

--> let mc run around, try get a job in local stores, or be rejected for offering healing skills caus they are low leveld etc.,
put the mc in a position where it is believable to say "ok, when starving too long I lose health, its evening now - I HAVE to do something" ... "ok.. f* it, its just a game, I ll go into the ally"
and when in the ally, show some struggle maybe. You are a dude, playn a girl in a game that lets you feel, smell and taste stuff.
Now you are on your knees and there is blowjob action ahead.
Im pretty sure there are a lot of interesting thoughts going through his head. This drags US into the mcs perspective, it creates insight and bonding.
Also I d say, the first blowjob doesnt have to be "the best suckle" of that random guys life. No shame in failing there and afterwards still be "lucky" to run into the group... Its about starting, and even if the "Healslut" might be "blessed" with skills, as we all probably know, a gamer first has to learn how to use the skills to actually do a good job.

All of this doesnt need a lot of extra pics, but it adds depth and a comprehensible start off to the whole thing, especially considering that gender/bender thing.

These are my thoughts on it so far. Maybe it helps/inspires, if not -thanks anyway for reading this far

Good luck and I hope this game will stick around

 

[myuhinny]

@BruceLee73

Kayden and Leigh are traps this is how traps looks and they will always look like weaklings you couldn't call them a trap if they looked like roidinators.

 

[BruceLee73]

@BruceLee73

Kayden and Leigh are traps this is how traps looks and they will always look like weaklings you couldn't call them a trap if they looked like roidinators.

yeah... but this is not really a mmorpg, is it?
also you might still make them look like adults instead of 13year olds...

 

[myuhinny]

@BruceLee73

Then they wouldn't be traps if they looked like a adult man. The term trap is used usually towards people that would at first glance to be cute girls, But are actually boys who have more of a feminine side whether being a homosexual or not. If they were more adult then they wouldn't really be seen as a trap anymore.

 

[Nymphonomicon]

Good start. Keep going.

 

[BruceLee73]

@BruceLee73

Then they wouldn't be traps if they looked like a adult man. The term trap is used usually towards people that would at first glance to be cute girls, But are actually boys who have more of a feminine side whether being a homosexual or not. If they were more adult then they wouldn't really be seen as a trap anymore.

yeah... good thing someone mentioned the obvious thing twice. thx. but again.. what exactly do we need traps for exactly? and wouldnt one have been enough?

 

[daviezwei]

Wow. just wow.

I am pleasantly surprised and definetly hooked.

Its a fun idea and I love the dev actually comes here to ask for suggestions.

Thank you! And yes, I do make it a point to listen to feedback.

I d like to share some too. Lets pretend I was the dev and had the skills to make such a game of my own -what would I change?

- We havent seen a lot of chars yet, but except for the guy in the ally all men look kinda like 13 year old weaklings.

at the same time the female characters mostly show a lot tougher looks.

Nothing against strong or capable fem chars, but there is no need to make "men" look like a blade of grass.

And who submits to a weakling really?

Well, to clarify, Kayden is slim but fit. His build is for speed because his job is to run around, dodge attacks, and flank enemies. Panki is a bit more buff than him because she wields a large lance and tends to take damage directly; she has to be sturdy. Leigh is a mage and therefore doesn't do any physical at all really, so he's slim and soft. Roopah is a ranger and that generally would lend her a softer build (except for the arms and back due to wielding a bow) but her Orc blood significantly boosts her natural muscularity. Lel is a willowy young woman because she doesn't engage in the action and doesn't eat much at all.

Also, if you think about it like a game, the weight and muscle sliders in character creation don't actually affect your stats. In fantasy MMORPGs, you might be a tiny gnome but still be able to engage in battle with a minotaur.

(EDIT: I realized I contradicted myself here with "their builds are in line with their jobs" and "builds are only for aesthetic reasons" so I wanted to make this edit. The first point is how I truly feel about the character designs. The second point was just sort of dismissive, and I concede that it doesn't have any merit in my argument.)

- Start doing dirty things.

The game is well written so far but as mentioned by others, when it comes to that one "dirty" moment I feel like we missed something important on two levels here: a) be desperate enough to do it and b) how mc feels/thinks WHILE doing it.

from my perspective this part is not in line with the well written parts before and after.

--> let mc run around, try get a job in local stores, or be rejected for offering healing skills caus they are low leveld etc.,

put the mc in a position where it is believable to say "ok, when starving too long I lose health, its evening now - I HAVE to do something" ... "ok.. f* it, its just a game, I ll go into the ally"

and when in the ally, show some struggle maybe. You are a dude, playn a girl in a game that lets you feel, smell and taste stuff.

Now you are on your knees and there is blowjob action ahead.

Im pretty sure there are a lot of interesting thoughts going through his head. This drags US into the mcs perspective, it creates insight and bonding.

Also I d say, the first blowjob doesnt have to be "the best suckle" of that random guys life. No shame in failing there and afterwards still be "lucky" to run into the group... Its about starting, and even if the "Healslut" might be "blessed" with skills, as we all probably know, a gamer first has to learn how to use the skills to actually do a good job.

All of this doesnt need a lot of extra pics, but it adds depth and a comprehensible start off to the whole thing, especially considering that gender/bender thing.

Yes, I do plan on going back through that part and making a lot of changes. The alleyway stuff was more of a 'test' of Ren'Py to see how I could construct sex scenes in the game. I admittedly sort of rushed through it since I have limited time to work on this game right now and I wanted to get back to story progression. So yes, this will be more detailed and include the protagonist's feelings and thoughts.

These are my thoughts on it so far. Maybe it helps/inspires, if not -thanks anyway for reading this far

Good luck and I hope this game will stick around

I appreciate you sharing your thoughts. Thank you!

what exactly do we need traps for exactly? and wouldnt one have been enough?

The main reason is because I like traps. And what's better than one? Two!

But seriously, they are an integral part of the story. The protagonist meets these two pretty young men, is perhaps confused but interested in their muddled gender-presentation and sexual identities, and works to understand their unusual relationship.

So, in strict terms of the game, they are there to ignite a (gender-bending) curiosity in the protagonist that may never have been awoken otherwise.

And for the record, Kayden is eighteen and Leigh is twenty. Their faces and figures were modeled after actual male models (Jaco van den Hoven, Seth Atwell, Andrej Pejic, Michael Tintiuc, Stav Strashko, etc) with Leigh taking some inspiration from Erika Linder as well.

 

[BruceLee73]

so much thought behind it. I love it.

 

[poundmotion3d]

Great start ! maybe more sex scene

 

[monkeyshoulder]

I love the start, I would love this as an rpg (not just RPG Maker) as well.

 

[daviezwei]

so much thought behind it. I love it.

Thanks! I did a ton of planning before I even started writing. Probably too much. But I hope it shows!

Great start ! maybe more sex scene

Thanks! More sex stuffs in the next release, including a revamp of the alleyway scenes and, if you so choose, a wild night with rapey Roopah.

I love the start, I would love this as an rpg (not just RPG Maker) as well.

Thank you!

 

[myuhinny]

For me I avoided the goblin told the turd burglar from the alley to go fuck themselves will probably not do anything with Kayden or Leigh as they are guys the one that I wanted to lay with was lel but dickhead Kayden wouldn't allow it. Hopefully the MC will be able to kick all of their asses and make them sleep on the floors while the MC and lel sleep in the bed. So I ended up picking rupaul to sleep with there is also the biter that I could of picked as well.

 

[daviezwei]

For me I avoided the goblin told the turd burglar from the alley to go fuck themselves will probably not do anything with Kayden or Leigh as they are guys the one that I wanted to lay with was lel but dickhead Kayden wouldn't allow it. Hopefully the MC will be able to kick all of their asses and make them sleep on the floors while the MC and lel sleep in the bed. So I ended up picking rupaul to sleep with there is also the biter that I could of picked as well.

Hehe! I love how everyone is calling Roopah 'Rupaul' for some reason. I didn't even know who that was until I googled it, but it's pretty damn funny! But beware: if you pick Roopah, be ready for some submissive sexytimes. However, if you pick Panki (the biter), you will have a chaste night's sleep after chatting with her for a bit.

At first Kayden and Leigh are only approachable as a couple. If you elect to stay with them the first night, you don't have to do anything sexual. In the near future you will be able to 'buddy-up' with one or the other. So if you hate Kayden but still dig Leigh, that will still be a possible 'romance' path for you.

Lel will also be a romance option, of course, but it will take some work to get her to trust and like you. Regardless of whomever you choose to share a room with the first night, that choice will not bar you from pursuing Lel in the future.

 

[myuhinny]

@daviezwei

Roopah sounds close to Rupaul and also sounds like a fancy way to say it depending on how you pronounce it.

 

[daviezwei]

Hello! I am releasing version 0.1e of 'Healslut' for supporters shortly and I know it will be uploaded here soon (as well as to many other game-sharing sites). I don't have a problem with that. I understand that a lot of people cannot afford $5 a month for what amounts to an hour or two of entertainment yet still want the latest release of a game, but I do ask that anyone who can comfortably support me for as little as $2/month please consider it. I've put a lot of hours into this update and I would like to continue to work on this and other games. I really appreciate you taking a moment to consider supporting future updates if you enjoy the game!

Thanks everyone. I will give each of you a handshake in Hell!

 

[BruceLee73]

Hello! I am releasing version 0.1e of 'Healslut' for supporters shortly and I know it will be uploaded here soon (as well as to many other game-sharing sites). I don't have a problem with that. I understand that a lot of people cannot afford $5 a month for what amounts to an hour or two of entertainment yet still want the latest release of a game, but I do ask that anyone who can comfortably support me for as little as $2/month please consider it. I've put a lot of hours into this update and I would like to continue to work on this and other games. I really appreciate you taking a moment to consider supporting future updates if you enjoy the game!

(Speaking of which, I have another Ren'Py game that is getting close to its first release. It will not be supported or funded by Patreon due to the content, as it includes a lot incestuous innuendo and implied acts of forbidden taboos such as bestiality. The game is "Randi Redneck" and centers around making decisions for a young woman in the deep south working for the $100/mo rent her parents are charging for her for room (now that's she's a 'grown-up' and all) while trying to figure out why she apparently ain't good enough for her own daddy. It's a very tongue-in-cheek game and contains two extra heaping helpings of sexy humor. I intend to release it for free on itch.io when it is ready.)

Thanks everyone. I will give each of you a handshake in Hell!

It sometimes sounds pretty weird to say 5 bucks a month is not affordable, especially when you consider what else you spend 5 bucks on (or more) on a regular basis. I never did understand that, until I was in a bad situation which made me understand it very well. I finally managed to find my way out of it and get back on a healthy account. While I wont spend money the way I used to, I ll surely see to support my 2 or 3 most favourite devs here, and you are on that list with healslut because I see quality and potential here. I hope I can start next month, but good stuff needs to be supported. I know this work takes an insane amount of time and it needs to be respected and rewarded.
That said, I also appreciate your point of view, being kind of okay with sharing-sites but also asking for support. Great move!

Wish you the best and and a tonload of patrons

 

[Solasa]

The main reason is because I like traps. And what's better than one? Two!

But seriously, they are an integral part of the story. The protagonist meets these two pretty young men, is perhaps confused but interested in their muddled gender-presentation and sexual identities, and works to understand their unusual relationship.

So, in strict terms of the game, they are there to ignite a (gender-bending) curiosity in the protagonist that may never have been awoken otherwise.

And for the record, Kayden is eighteen and Leigh is twenty. Their faces and figures were modeled after actual male models (Jaco van den Hoven, Seth Atwell, Andrej Pejic, Michael Tintiuc, Stav Strashko, etc) with Leigh taking some inspiration from Erika Linder as well.

I really like this answer, if the developer enjoys writing some specific characters/fetishes they should keep at it even if it isn't everyones favourite cup of tea.

We've seen too many promising games become bad copies of popular games because developers have listened to critique instead of going for a story that they are good at telling and enjoy making. Those games usually end up abandoned pretty quick because the game goes toward what the author thinks that people want to see instead of what they want to create.

I really enjoyed the start to this game, keep it up! On the shortlist for next patreon to support

 

[smith66]

Yes another DZ game! I really like what you've done so far looking forward to more.