dosrando

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I have now re-modified Chapter 1 to make Amelie more viable as "Mom" and the girls as "sisters" if you so wish!
Great stuff, thank you! As I say, your efforts are appreciated :)

Also re. getting a bit more exposure to your little project - perhaps make it's own thread and direct people there? It'd probably be better than getting lost in all the comments here :)
 
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Great stuff, thank you! As I say, your efforts are appreciated :)

Also re. getting a bit more exposure to your little project - perhaps make it's own thread and direct people there? It'd probably be better than getting lost in all the comments here :)
Yeah you're right lol I'm pretty new to this forum life stuff honestly! You think it would get seen if I just made a thread topic on this? Which forum section would you recommend I post in ?
 
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Suprserpent

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Stephanie's lust for the MC is so perfectly animalistic. She's incredibly forward but so innocent at the same time. I always look forward to her scenes. Honestly, though, I thought by the way things went at the start of the game, she would become your sub. Either way, it's perfect.
 

mahin007

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You're right, I misunderstood your ask. I stand corrected. Truth is, through my whole playthrough I didn't experience a single bug or flaw. Not sure what the difference will be between the test version and the final one. Guess we'll see.
In case you didnt notice, there's no audio in chapter 8 and Xeno said he bought an pack to add sfx/music into this
 
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It's actually quite difficult to judge your work. You'd have to play both versions next to each other at the same time to see the difference.
Crazy thought: If you release a test version with the original dialogue and the new dialogue above each other on different lines, then we could REALLY give easy/thorough feedback.
I, for one, am interested in seeing the rewrite, because texts along the line of 'I think the Father Davie is having drinks with his buddies' is just 100% terrible.
 
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It's actually quite difficult to judge your work. You'd have to play both versions next to each other at the same time to see the difference.
Crazy thought: If you release a test version with the original dialogue and the new dialogue above each other on different lines, then we could REALLY give easy/thorough feedback.
I, for one, am interested in seeing the rewrite, because texts along the line of 'I think the Father Davie is having drinks with his buddies' is just 100% terrible.
I've actually created a Thread in the Mods section for this Re-Write which includes some screenshots of the dialogue in question as examples, and ofc the script file for those interested in downloading and sampling it. (The thread is still currently awaiting approval by an Admin?)

It's quite difficult to really give the full picture of just how much of a change has been made overall, but I think the images at least convey the general idea. The MC is livelier and more humorous overall and each of the characters are still themselves I'd like to think, just dialled up a few more levels in terms of vocabulary and personality.

I think the original writing served well in some area's but just wasn't saying much in others and I saw the potential for some far more interesting and fun interactions than the original VN script was giving us.

Once the Mod Thread is approved and goes public I'll reference it here and link it for you and others to check out !

Thanks for the responding and giving feedback, it's honestly always appreciated! Oh! And as I come across strange dialogue like the example you made, it will definitely be squashed haha.
 

otakubob25

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I like her just fine. But the other 2 are evolving with time while she has remained pretty constant, which most people get bored with eventually. She is the one the MC has the longest-standing emotional connection with, so while the MC is working hard on Amelie conquest and enjoying being a little submissive to Stephanie right now, I expect him to end up with Kylie in the end.
your not alone kylee and steph, am not fan of amilie personaly.
I feel like the only Kylee fan here lmao.
your not alone am fan of kylee and steph, am no fan of amilie and i think i got lil annoyed of the over hype of her in the tread.
 
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gentlemanclub

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your not alone am fan of kylee and steph, am no fan of amilie and i think i got lil annoyed of the over hype of her in the tread.
I don't think Amelie is overhyped. A lot of the fans here tend to enjoy Amelie. Everyone have their own taste honestly.

I think what Xenorav should've done is branching and add equal amount of contents for the characters since there are a handful of main love interests. But I am guessing he most likely wouldn't since he didn't plan the game to be a choice based game. This fucks up a lot of things for the fan because now the fans of their own girls fight over who's contents should be implemented next.
 

Bombmaster

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true, Amelie path is a slow burn going into morally complicated territory. A good n@n-mommy vibe. People dig.

Alas Kylee is flavorless path, the first one to bed and that's it, tuned into a pseudo "tsundere" going hot and cold getting eclipsed by Stephanie eager crazy crush vibes.

Sure some people find her annoying but her role is more developed than her sister.

The feud between sisters is fun, and kylee serves this purpose I guess.

Her friend (Kylee) and boyfriend could turn into a more spicy route. But I don't think Xenorav is going that way. Sadly.
 
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