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I'm not familiar with Joiplay or emulators I'm afraid, as far as I know this version is for Windows platform. Sorry I can't be much help in that area!
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This link ?
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<-- Could you try it and let me know if it doesn't work? I just downloaded from it now, thanks!It works bro, but damn, I thought its just a small file that you only need to put in the game folder
- Jan 26, 2022
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Yeah I tried it that way but it would cause some random error messages that I just couldn't pin down effectively, it turned out just uploading the entire game folder was the most reliable way to share the mod I'm afraid.It works bro, but damn, I thought its just a small file that you only need to put in the game folder
I'm really new to all this stuff so I guess I just lack the knowledge to pin down what was causing the issue, sorry about that!
Looking forward to chapter 4. Trying to carry on with the base game but your rework is top notch! Any update on the progress?
- Jan 26, 2022
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I've not been at it recently due to other life based distractions haha, but it shouldn't be too much longer! I just need to tidy it up essentially and reduce as many issues with it as I can!
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So this is still ongoing?
And will it continue for future chapters as well?
And will it continue for future chapters as well?
- Jan 26, 2022
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Yes it is ongoing and it will continue up to the latest chapters! Thanks for taking an interest!
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I’m curious about how you decide what dialogue to include—do you base it on the context of the surrounding scenes, or is it more about capturing what feels right for the conversation?
On another note, have you considered adjusting the two-period separators to proper ellipses (three periods)? It’s a small tweak, but it can make the text look more polished and professional.
- Jan 26, 2022
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It's a bit of column A and a bit of column B actually haha! I am by no means a professional or qualified writer so what I write is 100% based off feel and experiences. I have not in fact even finished the entirety of this VN I'm just sort of reading the chapter ahead then backtracking and adjusting as I go!
I'm also going back to Chapter 1 occasionally and playing through up to Chapter 4 and making adjustments to things to make it read better or try to temper the pacing somewhat, for example someone mentioned that Kylee and the MC's relationship is too "established" from the start of the game and perhaps I leaned into that a bit too much, so I'm looking at trying to flatten that out somewhat and paint them more as extremely good "friends" and the catalyst really being Mia's "party".
Funny you should bring that up! I actually adjusted them to two purely so that I could keep track roughly of where I'd edited up to, if I run into scenes with the proper three period ellipsis I know it's the original dialogue. Although to be honest at this stage I feel like the original dialogue is so jarringly different to my own writing now it stands out like a sore thumb lol
Thanks for being interested enough to ask these little questions, Its always great to have an interaction!
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Thanks for being a sport and giving me a proper answer, I appreciate that. I can see what you mean with it being too established. It does somehow appear that the MC may simply be brief and curt to begin with, which may explain the original dialogue, but that does not explain the other characters.
My greatest irk with the original is that the characters feel flat, let alone the dialogue. They do not possess a tone unique to them, nor any personality that shines through in the dialogue.
And you're welcome. At times it can be hard to give people proper feedback without it being misunderstood as criticism, instead of a wish for their work to get a tiny bit better if possible.
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Yes! The original author makes it very clear that Kylee and the MC are pre-established for sure, their banter and back and worth pretty much spells it out right away as well as the party event and how that unfolds.
I think Amelie's slow burn with the MC can also be easily understood to some degree (though of course porn logic is required to nudge things in a direction that they otherwise would not under MOST real world scenarios lol).
Stephanie is really just monkey see monkey do, riffing off seeing Kylee's interactions with the MC and using that to fuel her own jealous possession of him.
My Re-Write still tries to keep her as the somewhat irritating younger sibling but also inject some likeability and at least a little bit of actual brotherly concern for her. Is it enough to explain away why she's so readily hopping over familial boundaries to garner his sexual attentions? Most likely no haha but we do what we can!
I've also tried to include clear "motivators" for the other characters such as Mia and her mother Lauren, though of course they also operate under the same previously mentioned "logic" haha. With Mia she harbours a secret "incest" fetish which ofc drives her towards Kylee and MC's interactions and with Lauren I leaned into the ex-husband being an abuser, mentally shaming her and making her feel unattractive and unwanted (though this reference isn't too overt and is mostly revealed if you are mean and reject Lauren in Chapter 2 in her bedroom), the MC represents her sexual liberation so to speak.
This! This is precisely what prompted me to take up the mantle and start this Re-Write! I thought the VN had potential but the dialogue was so abrupt and jarring at times I felt there could be more personality and (humanity?) inserted here and there to just make it a more enjoyable read.
I always fully appreciate good or bad feedback for sure!
Was wondering if I should play this now or wait for the chapter 4 update?
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Might be best to wait honestly, version 0.40 will be including adjustments to dialogue that runs right from Chapter 1 up to 4 also!
Thanks for the quick response. Any eta on next release? No rush, was just wondering.
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Hopefully before the year is out! Time willing!
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I am confused.
I downloaded your 'complete' archive and unpacked it.
But, when I start to play it, none of the choices are marked (i.e., the walkthrough mod part doesn't seem to work).
Also, in one of your comments I saw explained that pink is good and red is bad, but I don't see that screen at all.
I chose to start a new game. Is that incorrect?
I downloaded your 'complete' archive and unpacked it.
But, when I start to play it, none of the choices are marked (i.e., the walkthrough mod part doesn't seem to work).
Also, in one of your comments I saw explained that pink is good and red is bad, but I don't see that screen at all.
I chose to start a new game. Is that incorrect?
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Sorry for the confusion! Those features are in version 0.40 the Chapter 4 release which I'm currently working on! Coming as soon as possible! Hope that clears things up!
This does not seem to work at all. I downloaded the file extracted and ran it. Lines of text do not match the screenshots shown on the front page. very strange as it should be just an extract and run the exe.