Can you share examples, if possible? I'd love to make sure it reads as well as it can
After the last update, I can give you something.
As an example the breakfast scene.
Text:
All three of my "whatever you choose" looked at me with smiles on their faces
Why not just:
All three of them looked....
It would make reading a lot smoother and more natural if instead of guest / landlord or whatever you chose, you simply used he, she, they, them....
And one last note:
I was fuckin disappointed not to see a fat gorilla butt in the office.
Let poor women work for you again, you lazy bastard!!
