As a fellow game dev who's english is not the primary language, I would like to contribute to the thread after having tried your game. Altough I am not a fan of visual novel, I must say that this whole thread picqued my curiosity.
First off, I also received a lot of harsh comment when I first released my game so I know how that feels. Unfortunately, it's part of the experience and you should learn how to cope with it. I personally think that everything can be said, but there's a way to say it.
Regarding the game, I am impressed by the visuals. I know very basic stuff with Daz but I know for sure there is a lot of time and effort in these renders. Good job, altough there are indeed some flaws (for example, the guards before entering the forest looks really small compared to the adventurer, the black dick is indeed weird, it doesn't look like just a darker tone of the skin, and the mouth of the servent after the blowjob part? Looks like Melina from MK. Again, I think that could be normal after having to suck a dick that big
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As for the writing, these are still some errors here and there but all in all, it was better than I thought. You could benefit from trying to run your "script" through ChatGPT first, so the syntax and grammar gets corrected. And from your earlier comments, you talk like your story is the best thing to have happened since sliced bread. I think it is OK, but I think you should show some modesty.
Finally, like a said, I'm a developer too. I know how much work it takes to create a game, especially when you release it in another language or when it's your first one and you're learning the ropes while trying to deliver something people will enjoy. But I also think that :
- You are doing too much in having people subscribing to your Patreon: Do not create a game for the money. If people are supporting you then it's a nice plus for sure, but do it for you. For your own experience, thrill and amusement. People should sub for what you offer and deliver, not to uncensor a picture or see a sex scene in a sex-based game;
- As a writer of a visual novel, you should pay effort and attention to your posts here. My first reaction was not to play your game since I based the quality of the writing on how you were expressing yourself here;
- Grammarly is fine, but trust people here that speaks english 24/7. I don't know that app, but does it checks for syntax too?;
- You take the comments here too personal: Even if someone says that you are a cuck, who cares? We don't know you. I think you should not engage in arguing on that.
I would like you to read this post as I tried to write it; respectfully. I do not want to insult you, your partner or your feelings in any ways.
Cheers!
(This post was not redacted or revised by ChatGPT, despite my advice to OP
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