Ren'Py - Abandoned - Hero's Harem Guild [v0.1.2.3b Public] [Komisari]

Good Points
+ Story and plot feels good, interesting and well written.
+ Character developments and their own stories lovely, sometimes sad and definetely well written.
+ Game have realy good sense of humor. Most of story scenes was pretty funny Espacily that chicken is killing me LOL
+ Girls/women looks realy hot/cute.
+ We have lots of animations. Even some talk scenes have some little animations to. And they are looks decent/good. But they need some work and improve.
+ We have enough content but for getting those contents we need make lots of grind and its little bit boring...

Bad Points
- Game have some grammer problems and typos.
- For getting scenes or making some quests we need make lots of grind. First you need make grind for getting relationship points but they are not that boring i say. Secondly you need money for quests and its OMG... Its god damn boring... Fishing, mining or sending guild members missions etc gives realy low amount of money and for making quests you will need lots of money. DEV need change that money amounts for sure. Maybe grind make game more long but make more boring aswell.
- Game size is 6.5GB... Its pretty big size and there is no torrent download you can use, i hope with next update we can see torrent download option because its looks like new update gonna have bigger file size even more than current one...
- We didn't get update for 1.5 year and interestingly DEV still active user in this site so i asked him when we gonna get update and he said: ''Update will come before the first quarter of this year or around those dates. (It can take longer, but if it does, it would be an extra month or two.'' which means this game gonna get nearly after 2 year without update... Well... I hope its not gonna be big disappointment after nearly 2 year without update... Still not making update for 2 year is not acceptable... At this rate this game never gonna get 5 star from me, unless he make 2 year worth amazing update this literaly means permanent -1 star for my review. Anyway, we will see...

For The End
This is realy good game and i love it! But grind makes this game boring and makes it longer than it needs to be, thats not natural length of game and needs fix ASAP with new update, i hope DEV will fix that problem. Now im gonna give 3 star because of not getting update for 1.5 year and bad points but i do believe this game can be 4-5 star rate game without those problems, i hope they can achive that...

Seeing the glowing reviews for a game that really looks like my kinda thing I was really excited to try this. I played for about five minutes before I couldn't take it anymore.

The character models look fine mostly. Some are a bit weird but all in all the visual aspect is fine. The gameplay from what little I saw seem like a sandbox/vn hybrid in the style of Corrupted Kingdoms (complete with a very similiar UI) which works very well for that game so there's no reason it couldn't work well here.

The problem comes down to the writing. That's a very broad statment but it can be broken up into three seperate issues. I'll discuss them in order of least to most severe.

The first problem is that the dev is obviously not a native english speaker. There's a lot of grammatical errors as well as some confusion about terms, such as refering to what is clearly a rooster as a chicken. This problem, while vexing is not a big deal simply because it is very easy to fix. Just having a native english speaker taking an editing pass should sort this out pretty quick.

The second issue is the main character. He's pretty annoying. The intention here is probably to be funny but I just found him to be insufferable. A good main character dosen't necessarily have to be likeable but I would argue that there's a difference between a character who's unsympathetic and one who's just annoying and that in a game such as this the idea is probably for the player to project themselves on to the protagonist. Most of us probably don't think of ourselves as annoying doofuses (even if others see us that way) so it's going to be hard to project upon someone who is an annoying doofus. Though it would take a bit of work this problem could also be fixed. The best solution would probably be to give the player some different conversation options. They don't have to impact the story or anything, just give the player an option to behave a bit less like a class clown if they don't find that whole sthick funny.

The third problem is the worst and also the most difficult to adress since it pervades the entire game. It's a bit vauge and difficult to define but I guess the writing feels kind of childish. It really feels like a bad anime filtered through a western perspective. Lines like ''eeeeeeeeeehhhh!'' and ''What will I do with this FUCKING chicken?'' just makes me roll my eyes and this is what really took me out of the game. As intriguing as I found other aspects of the game I just couldn't bear the writing for long.

I don't typically write negative reviews, if I don't like a game I just delete it and move on with my time. The reason I wrote this up was because there is potential here and I really hope the game improves. I'll revisit it sometime in the fututer for another look. Untill then I wish good luck to the dev.

Review for v.0.1.0,

Making an edit for this for my review for V.0.1.0 ...
As usual, the amount of work went into this was AMAZING. A ton of things got upgraded! However... Tons of things got downgraded...

Good:
Models are still nice, plot heading to a good story, nice visuals and UI, fun leveling up mechanics, and nice scenes.

Bad:
Grammar/English issues, tedious mechanics that is more of an annoying chore instead of little challenge/obstacle (For example... Fishing... We have to continuously go into our bag... Just to get a small amount of money for example...), unnecessary dialogues that made the story more cringy than funny (Like the rooster/chicken part for example... I guess it doesn't humor me if others find it funny), and some reason, the atmosphere of the game isn't the same as it was in the demo. Like I got a fun and glorious impression in the demo. However, even though this has better UI and graphics... It just had an impression of "Torturing the player" to get a small reward.

Regardless, I still have high hopes for this game and it's potential!
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"Review for v.0.0.1,
I hardly ever write a review. But, this game really caught my attention!
For a first release game, this is packing a ton of content. Both for ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) content and a really nice story that brings you in. I can't wait to see how the story goes on!

Many of the characters are likable and some aren't. That's how all stories be like. We (as the readers) are entitled to have our likes and dislikes. (In other words, our opinions).

The story is very interesting. I wonder how it will continue out as well to how it will be handle. So far, it got pretty spicy and then it became really likable!

Gameplay wise, it need some polishing. Like, it could use some quality of like changes (Like, changing the navigation, UI and etc), add new options to play out the game (Like, instead of just selecting a quest and send off a character to get an income, talking to the characters, and etc.... There should be more interactions. But, like I said, it's a first release so this is like a taste of the game which is great!), and the ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) content is great (Obviously I don't need to say there should be more, the developer is definitely adding more to the game).

Information: Watching from the developer's discord, the sneak peak updates he/she is uploading, and the announcements is nice and interactive which some other developers don't do. So give the developer a shot!

There are numerous of grammar, in game bugs, and etc that was already said in the thread discussion that the developer is aware of. But, as I said, it a first release and it somewhat minor... But, shouldn't be ignored.

Hope for the best for this developer! Looking forward to the new updates that are coming out!"

Good game for its pre-alpha release 0.0.1. It has a lot to improve such like small bugs incomplete sections like shops and building construction but it also has a lot of good content already. It still has a lot of room to build and I feel it will grow as Time goes on

Very promising new game, animations are top notch. Many games that have been developed for months don't have the same level of polish as this. The navigation is a bit tricky with clicking on the edges of the screen to get around, and I didn't see a clock to help track my schedule. For a first release this game is definitely on my watch list. great job!

For a 0.0.1 build it's got a fair bit of content, the RPG system for the quests and inventory is pretty neat, definitely looking forward to the future builds and I'm looking forward to seeing more of Lucy in future builds. She's so darn adorable and I'm grateful for stumbling upon this game, I hope everyone else who plays this enjoys it as much as I'm enjoying it currently.
Okay, so after playing the latest 0.1.1 build I can definitely say that it has improved a lot more. There was still a few grammatical issues here and tthere but they weren't as noticeable and the game itself was very enjoyable. One particylar scene and quote I love involves Squares and Thots if you know that scene then you know. The visuals have also improved a great amount too and I find myself enjoying this game the more I play it. Keep up the great work Komi! <3

As of v.0.0.1, this is already a great demo worth playing and I'm keen to follow the dev !

I see great potential in it, with this guild gameplay that requires to spend money well grinded on developping your HQ and the town. It's a real game. Not much is obviously ready at the moment, but that is enough to get an opinion on the potential of this title.

About the girls, the models are obvioulsy pretty and the animation all along (while in dialog and during the H-scenes) is a pleasant surprise.

Hot girls and a lot of animated stuff and the story is interesting too.

Has a lot of great potential and a hot busty cat-girl. Now i just want a hot busty cow-girl or dragon or both.

There are some bugs in the game but it is a v0.01 so nothing out of the usual. This game could easily make it into my top 5 lewd games.

review for v.0.0.1

It's a great start to a game. You can really tell that a lot of thought went into making this and it's not your usual first version 10 minute demo. There's actually a decent chunk of content here, with real gameplay, story progression, and even sex scenes.

Writing : 4.8/5 - it's readable english. There's some funny dialouge in there as well. There are a few awkward sentences here and there, but they're few and far between.

Story: 4/5 - nothing to exactly write home about yet, but the story is more in service of the gameplay/characters at the moment, so I don't mind that it's not crazy intricate or inventive. The intro scenes hooked me, but it looses points for being a bit of a bait and switch. The series of events that lead you towards running a Hero's guild are kinda contrived, but there's nothing exactly offensive about it. There's enough story here that it gets the job done.

Characters: 4.4/5 - The characters are good and unique. They all feel different from each other and they're all likeable. Most of them have hints of added depth lurking beneath the surface. A few of them come off as kind of silly at first, but after the intro they seem less over the top. All in all a good cast that I'm interested it.

Renders : 4.5/5 - it's good. And the sex scenes work. Nothing particularly crazy for a koikatsu game, but it's above par. I have no complaints. The dev gets bonus points for having a lot of little idle animations throughout the game that make the scenes feel more alive.

Gameplay: 3.7/5 - it's typical go here, do that, save money, buy that, type gameplay. Not a lot of grind, but they lose pints for making you wait multiple days to progress some plotlines. Also there should really be a better way to advance time without having to go to your room to sleep. Or at the very least they should add a shortcut that allows you to instantly travel to your room and take a nap. Also the house navigation system is a little annoying. It would be better if they just had buttons at the bottom of the screen for each room, like a lot of devs do. Arrow based navigation always leaves me accidentally going places I didn't intend to.


Overall enjoyment: 4.6/5 - I gave the game the 5 point bump because it has a lot of potential, and I really like the production value. It feels like a game that is pretty closed to polished right out the gates, and I like the direction things are going. It could very easily be on the level of something like Mythic Manor given enough time and consistent updates.

(edit: as of v.0.1.1 the characters and writing has gotten even better. The gameplay has also been improved as they've implemented a few of the tings I've suggested, like a button to warp you to your room. The times you have to wait for certain events to occur seem to be either completely gone, or mitigated by the fact that you have other quests to accomplish while you're waiting, so that no longer bugs me. So far the game is living up to the hype.)