Versace217
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Just played your game for the first time and it is EXCELLENT! The pacing was good and the animation top-notch. The prologue shows that that Saki has a certain perverse nature to her and that becomes more apparent when her mother is introduced, so there really isn't any issue with the corruption aspect of it.
I do admit that I agree with one thing in this thread that could've been better: Jake's training. The transformation is great and it's in line with what Saki wishes and it's also a desire of Jake to have better proportion but consigning him to a future where he just "watches" Saki get fucked by Nichole while Elaina has him on a dildo is pretty "hot", but he should be allowed to explore his newfound sexuality, rather than having the Holdcrafts control him, I believe that would make the story and transformation more organic and erotic.
There are some things I recommend though:
1. Pausing the music at certain points. The most prominent example is after Nichole and Saki work on the garden and are relaxing on the bridge. If there had been a pause in regular music and instead had a light ambient music combined with the nature sounds, it would've made a VERY moving scene. Also missing from the nature sounds was the sound of the water flowing under the bridge. I'm pretty sure you can find DRM-free sound on Youtube for that.
2. Time advances should be made more apparent. Rather than saying "A few days later", you can add a clock in the top bar. It would work like: 14 June, 2022 when the even starts and then when you finish the event, the date changes to 17 June, 2022. The reason for this is because it became apparent that some MONTHS had passed after the initial meeting with the Holdcrafts. However you don't really get a grasp of the time changing just by saying "A few days later". This way you can also set a unified timeline for events and would also make things easier to show like pregnancy.
3. LET US PET THE CAT! (Seriously, I excepted it to say meow but then we just glide over it! My disappointment was abysmal!)
4. The game also needs more sex-sfx. I'm not sure if you've planned that for the future or not but adding those sfx makes a hell of a lot of difference. And I'm not just talking about the plap plap or suck suck sfx, but moaning and heavy breathing noises. The scene where Nichole reveals her identity to Saki, and then pushes her dick against her and then give her a dose of what's to come. God damn that was beyond hot! I literally re-loaded just to watch that scene again. Adding sfx to that would've been beyond erotic.
5. Events need to be triggered by timeline. What I mean is rather than opening all the current scenes at once, have scenes be shown in sequence. The example for this is when Saki, Jake, Nichole and Sarina are at the beach, the events are all open and you can view them in ANY sequence. But when you view Jake's POV, it becomes apparent that there is in fact a sequence. I know you want the game to be a sand-boxy "find the scenes" type of game, but for events like these there needs to be a sequence. Secondary "hidden" scenes can all be open in the map after a main event but the primary events need a sequence.
All in all this is game in my top ten and if "this" is your first project, then boy am I in awe of your future accomplishments. The only advice I can give you is this:
Even if you make developing these games as your primary SOI, you must never give in to the wants and demands of your subscribers. They subscribed to you BECAUSE of what YOU produced, not what they demanded you produce, so always keep true to your OWN desire.
Sorry to spring that sentimental talk on you, but I've seen too many promising devs fall victim to this so I just had to say it as your content is top-notch.
Good luck to you, and I'll be providing more feedback for future versions, and in case anything more comes to mind.
Just played your game for the first time and it is EXCELLENT! The pacing was good and the animation top-notch. The prologue shows that that Saki has a certain perverse nature to her and that becomes more apparent when her mother is introduced, so there really isn't any issue with the corruption aspect of it.
I do admit that I agree with one thing in this thread that could've been better: Jake's training. The transformation is great and it's in line with what Saki wishes and it's also a desire of Jake to have better proportion but consigning him to a future where he just "watches" Saki get fucked by Nichole while Elaina has him on a dildo is pretty "hot", but he should be allowed to explore his newfound sexuality, rather than having the Holdcrafts control him, I believe that would make the story and transformation more organic and erotic.
There are some things I recommend though:
1. Pausing the music at certain points. The most prominent example is after Nichole and Saki work on the garden and are relaxing on the bridge. If there had been a pause in regular music and instead had a light ambient music combined with the nature sounds, it would've made a VERY moving scene. Also missing from the nature sounds was the sound of the water flowing under the bridge. I'm pretty sure you can find DRM-free sound on Youtube for that.
2. Time advances should be made more apparent. Rather than saying "A few days later", you can add a clock in the top bar. It would work like: 14 June, 2022 when the even starts and then when you finish the event, the date changes to 17 June, 2022. The reason for this is because it became apparent that some MONTHS had passed after the initial meeting with the Holdcrafts. However you don't really get a grasp of the time changing just by saying "A few days later". This way you can also set a unified timeline for events and would also make things easier to show like pregnancy.
3. LET US PET THE CAT! (Seriously, I excepted it to say meow but then we just glide over it! My disappointment was abysmal!)
4. The game also needs more sex-sfx. I'm not sure if you've planned that for the future or not but adding those sfx makes a hell of a lot of difference. And I'm not just talking about the plap plap or suck suck sfx, but moaning and heavy breathing noises. The scene where Nichole reveals her identity to Saki, and then pushes her dick against her and then give her a dose of what's to come. God damn that was beyond hot! I literally re-loaded just to watch that scene again. Adding sfx to that would've been beyond erotic.
5. Events need to be triggered by timeline. What I mean is rather than opening all the current scenes at once, have scenes be shown in sequence. The example for this is when Saki, Jake, Nichole and Sarina are at the beach, the events are all open and you can view them in ANY sequence. But when you view Jake's POV, it becomes apparent that there is in fact a sequence. I know you want the game to be a sand-boxy "find the scenes" type of game, but for events like these there needs to be a sequence. Secondary "hidden" scenes can all be open in the map after a main event but the primary events need a sequence.
All in all this is game in my top ten and if "this" is your first project, then boy am I in awe of your future accomplishments. The only advice I can give you is this:
Even if you make developing these games as your primary SOI, you must never give in to the wants and demands of your subscribers. They subscribed to you BECAUSE of what YOU produced, not what they demanded you produce, so always keep true to your OWN desire.
Sorry to spring that sentimental talk on you, but I've seen too many promising devs fall victim to this so I just had to say it as your content is top-notch.
Good luck to you, and I'll be providing more feedback for future versions, and in case anything more comes to mind.
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