Haha Indeed the scene was weird
You if are accepting suggestion:
I think you should rework that scene and make the route more accessible, the whole netorase could have a early trigger (the bath scene with alex and the mc for exemple).
The Humiliation NTR reason for Lily being mad is somewhat interesting, I like the whole made up reason because she can't tell the real one but the MC obeying everything and being dense as fuck is just weird... Could have a better reason, like threaten to break up or something, the mc decide to obey and because of it Lily realize that she can exploit that. Making him less dense also would be good.
The second scene with Alex is also weird, there isn't logic for the mc say nothing, I think it would be better the option being a boring or uninspired praise , making Lily mad for the lack of effort.
Anyway I hope for your best, rare to find good devs these days, I will suport the patreon when I receive this month cash.
Good Luck.
Let me first say that I have only "tried" to play this game once; I got discouraged and found kinda distasteful;
- That a Douchebag, former "friend", possibly ex-boyfriend, of MC's girlfriend is 'invited' to stay with them after He is evicted from his former residence (what was the cause of his eviction??) and PROCEEDS to think it Is Okay to NTR/steal girlfriend from under nose of MC and the Girlfriend allows it. She REALLY Is not much of a Girlfriend,...
Now,.."
Could have a better reason, like threaten to break up or something, the mc decide to obey and because of it Lily realize that she can exploit that."
Technically, the Girlfriend would/Does have a Valid reason/excuse; NOT Much exploitations needed.
- "The MC works as a writer but has been unable to produce anything that he considers high quality."
1) the MC spends countless hours "working" on his writing (12 - 20 hrs)
- if GF is "needy" she will be feeling neglected emotionally and sexually; No "quality time".
2)
His writing efforts fail to produce anything worthy of publishing.
- meaning No Income
3)
and going through depression because of it.
- This WILL and does put emotional strain on relationship. Again, GF is unsatisfied.
So, the GF Could play 'Threaten to leave' card; forcing MC to Obey/comply with her.
- The MC does not come across as the Dominate partner; and even less so now that He is depressed.
So this leaves it Up to the GF to 'take the lead'.
OR,... the MC gives up his writing and turns to creating a VN game where the MC and his Girlfriend invites the GF's ex- BF to live with them; after he is evicted from his Home. They work together to humiliate and degrade him and make him their "Sissy" Bitch.
The MC make a shitload of $$$ from all the Subscribers.
The MC Then packs up all of his shit, moves to a Condo on the Beach and finds a New GF. THE END