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How far are you into the game? MC is a fucking giant of a tank
Only just started it really. The guard captain is taller than him and when meeting Abigail he's barely looking down at all despite her race being described as half the size of a human. I had half expected he was younger than i thought and there was going to be another few years of time skip.
Though in the first training fight with Miranda there's at least one scene where you're towering over her.
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There's a timeskip of 3 years, during wich time he goes from the same build as the princess to being fucking huge
- Dec 24, 2019
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Who is the MC's biological mother and father and thus who are they related to?
I know we can't expect too much from someone with an all-caps name, but it's been hinted at pretty heavily so far that MC's lineage and/or surviving biological family members is something to watch for as the story progresses.
Anyway ...
I like your story so far Jabbonk, though I think the princess needs to step it up and start bringing in the harem recruits herself.
Maybe we find out she isn't just a voyeur but also has a breeding kink? Who knows ...
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That's pretty much the reason why I'm so pissed right now after seeing the title and then realising it has nothing to do with it.
This is bait. And I demand compensation! *angry fist shake*
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Investigating this now! thanks for the heads up!
Edit: Found the Error! Sorry about that! It will be fixed in the next patch!
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Ok, I just got to chapter 2 and I have to say.
Much as I like the story so far, what's with all the timeskips?
We spent like half a day following the MC in the beginning, then a one month skip, which fine, makes sense, but then after just two days worth of time it skips again, this time a few years at once. Like, where's the character development and everything?
I understand if the purpose is to make sure the characters are of age, but at least do it more smoothly, please. No need to rush, we can spend a bit more time building up relationships and the world so it doesn't feel so jarring.
Edit: And the timeskip itself is verifying exactly that. Why do we need exposition on the relationships the MC now has with other characters, when the absolutely better option was to show how those relationships developed? The rule of show, don't tell is common writing advice for a reason.
Much as I like the story so far, what's with all the timeskips?
We spent like half a day following the MC in the beginning, then a one month skip, which fine, makes sense, but then after just two days worth of time it skips again, this time a few years at once. Like, where's the character development and everything?
I understand if the purpose is to make sure the characters are of age, but at least do it more smoothly, please. No need to rush, we can spend a bit more time building up relationships and the world so it doesn't feel so jarring.
Edit: And the timeskip itself is verifying exactly that. Why do we need exposition on the relationships the MC now has with other characters, when the absolutely better option was to show how those relationships developed? The rule of show, don't tell is common writing advice for a reason.
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I love this game....buuuuuuuuuut it is in serious danger of running into the same nauseating 'the world is entirely composed of female characters and every single one of them is in love with the stunningly perfect and impossibly talented MC as soon as they lay eyes on him' syndrome, just like WVM and a few other games.
While its definitely up to the dev to realize his vision, some variety would help accentuate the different characters. Maybe he's not someone's type. Maybe he and another person clash in personality. Maybe they (gasp) don't like him at first! It doesn't have to be everyone and we aren't talking high level complexity, it would just be fun to CHASE the girls once in a while, instead of them lining up to get railed one after another.
For instance, that dark skinned apprentice guard would be the PERFECT rival for the MC. She's new, talented and visually distinct. Maybe instead of OPENLY (in her thoughts, that we as the viewer are able to read) hoping to get him into bed. Shouldn't she be more concerned with proving she's the greatest recruit of her class and not him? If you wanted to really play around with it, have her actually BE better. After all, MC is splitting focus, learning magic, getting and education and fucking everything that moves, he would have less time to train. This also gives the character motivation, which deepens the story. Now, I know, I know, do we still get to fuck her? OF COURSE WE DO!
But instead of it being a meaningless conquest (because we don't have to work for it), it might come as an adrenaline fueled 'mistake' at the end of a tense battle that they survived and saved each other's lives during. Or it might be an intense sparring match where their innate chemistry is shining through, and they trade violent blows, only to end up wrestling, and then "wrestling". This is just off the top of my head, it could be something else, the point is variety would aid the story.
Instead what we have is
1 This girl (insert literally any female character) wants to fuck you
2 Do you want to fuck her? Y N
If Yes, then you will at some point no matter what
If no, you won't.
3 Is she a main girl? Y N
If yes, you will get a handjob/blowjob/non penetrative sex act, while we do a 'slow burn' cause 30+ year old women aren't sure they're ready for sex yet
If No, you're going to fuck the shit out of her, possibly five seconds after you met her.
It would be a LOT more likely for you to have a casual sexual relationship with one of the girls you've known for years, but instead we have this.
Then we come to the male characters thing. There are no men in the kingdom of Homeland....This actually makes sense for the story, MC is the only guy around, and the women are crazy horny as a result. If only that was the actual plot. I think there are maybe two other men mentioned at all, one of the soldiers has a brother and the shopkeeper has a husband. That's it. I don't see any other men, I don't even hear about any other men.
Let's be clear, i'm not interested in fucking men, or even seeing them fuck one of my love interests, but since every populated character is a fuckable girl, it kind of limits the options for friendship or even companionship. Can I make a friend? Not a male one, it seems. I understand where the Dev is coming from, most of us don't want competition, but he's actually done too good a job, there's like eight main girls. That's a shitload of women. And there's at least another dozen in the to be fucked line behind them. So now there being absolutely no men comes of as sort of insecure and pathetic. As if any other man would steal away one of our precious harem. There can be other male characters, important non fuckable characters who may or may not compete with the MC. I'm in no way suggesting NTR, to be clear.
I write all this, not because the Dev is failing in any way. He's made a delightful little romp of a game. So enjoyable in fact, that many of us are interested in the plot and worldbuilding. Which means now Homelander requires more than just porn level writing to satisfy the non erotic parts of the game. Hopefully the Dev will rise to the occasion and give us a bit more diversity in the future.
Either way, I'm in for the long haul. Great work, I literally couldn't have done it better myself.
While its definitely up to the dev to realize his vision, some variety would help accentuate the different characters. Maybe he's not someone's type. Maybe he and another person clash in personality. Maybe they (gasp) don't like him at first! It doesn't have to be everyone and we aren't talking high level complexity, it would just be fun to CHASE the girls once in a while, instead of them lining up to get railed one after another.
For instance, that dark skinned apprentice guard would be the PERFECT rival for the MC. She's new, talented and visually distinct. Maybe instead of OPENLY (in her thoughts, that we as the viewer are able to read) hoping to get him into bed. Shouldn't she be more concerned with proving she's the greatest recruit of her class and not him? If you wanted to really play around with it, have her actually BE better. After all, MC is splitting focus, learning magic, getting and education and fucking everything that moves, he would have less time to train. This also gives the character motivation, which deepens the story. Now, I know, I know, do we still get to fuck her? OF COURSE WE DO!
But instead of it being a meaningless conquest (because we don't have to work for it), it might come as an adrenaline fueled 'mistake' at the end of a tense battle that they survived and saved each other's lives during. Or it might be an intense sparring match where their innate chemistry is shining through, and they trade violent blows, only to end up wrestling, and then "wrestling". This is just off the top of my head, it could be something else, the point is variety would aid the story.
Instead what we have is
1 This girl (insert literally any female character) wants to fuck you
2 Do you want to fuck her? Y N
If Yes, then you will at some point no matter what
If no, you won't.
3 Is she a main girl? Y N
If yes, you will get a handjob/blowjob/non penetrative sex act, while we do a 'slow burn' cause 30+ year old women aren't sure they're ready for sex yet
If No, you're going to fuck the shit out of her, possibly five seconds after you met her.
It would be a LOT more likely for you to have a casual sexual relationship with one of the girls you've known for years, but instead we have this.
Then we come to the male characters thing. There are no men in the kingdom of Homeland....This actually makes sense for the story, MC is the only guy around, and the women are crazy horny as a result. If only that was the actual plot. I think there are maybe two other men mentioned at all, one of the soldiers has a brother and the shopkeeper has a husband. That's it. I don't see any other men, I don't even hear about any other men.
Let's be clear, i'm not interested in fucking men, or even seeing them fuck one of my love interests, but since every populated character is a fuckable girl, it kind of limits the options for friendship or even companionship. Can I make a friend? Not a male one, it seems. I understand where the Dev is coming from, most of us don't want competition, but he's actually done too good a job, there's like eight main girls. That's a shitload of women. And there's at least another dozen in the to be fucked line behind them. So now there being absolutely no men comes of as sort of insecure and pathetic. As if any other man would steal away one of our precious harem. There can be other male characters, important non fuckable characters who may or may not compete with the MC. I'm in no way suggesting NTR, to be clear.
I write all this, not because the Dev is failing in any way. He's made a delightful little romp of a game. So enjoyable in fact, that many of us are interested in the plot and worldbuilding. Which means now Homelander requires more than just porn level writing to satisfy the non erotic parts of the game. Hopefully the Dev will rise to the occasion and give us a bit more diversity in the future.
Either way, I'm in for the long haul. Great work, I literally couldn't have done it better myself.
I feel like the girl the MC tutored missed the mark here. 1. She's wearing a modern school girl uniform when you meet her and 2. she comes off as the town bicycle, why on Earth would the MC who has permission from his princess girlfriend to basically make a harem want to enter into a relationship with her when he has a castle full of attractive women including the queen after him?
Is she a package deal with her mother or can we skip her and still get the mom because personally I found her off putting as fuck. She literally cleans herself up with some dudes shirt that just happens to be in her room and you can see several more lying around. Hell even her mom says she's gotta lot of dudes coming around. Good news is if the tutoring with the MC doesn't take she'd make bank in a brothel. (Side note please for the love of FUCK don't add brothel content)
Is she a package deal with her mother or can we skip her and still get the mom because personally I found her off putting as fuck. She literally cleans herself up with some dudes shirt that just happens to be in her room and you can see several more lying around. Hell even her mom says she's gotta lot of dudes coming around. Good news is if the tutoring with the MC doesn't take she'd make bank in a brothel. (Side note please for the love of FUCK don't add brothel content)
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This one paragraph is more erotic than 95% of the VN's on this site. Well done!
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There are 2 types of incest, blood & legal. Blood your actual blood relative and legal, your adoptive family. Being adopted myself from 5 months old, my mom & 2 sisters in my mind are no different than if I was born into the family, I have never been treated differently and in the law of my country's mind are "hand's off or go to jail".
Sometimes Devs try to cheat or don't really get it by throwing in "foster parents" into the mix which also has legal ramifications involved. Foster children are wards of the state, Foster Parents are paid handsomely to raise these kids, if they were to get sexually involved with their foster children there is the great possibility that all their assets will be frozen or seized and do far more jail time than someone diddling their adoptive sister.
For me, I had 2 sisters, 1 was also adopted, the other, the natural child of my adoptive parents (I had a thing for her) there is also my adoptive cousins... I could probably win in court to marry one of them as there is zero blood quantum, while beautiful, the 3 of them were shitty human beings! Then I have tracked down my biological parents, I have a half sister and 2 half brothers and several Aunts, Nieces and Cousins that share direct blood ties to me, and some of them are WOW!
They are so many different family dynamics out there other than just black & white, but I guess someone who has never experienced any of that wouldn't understand, but I hope I shed a light...
- Apr 26, 2020
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Very well stated Sir!
And it's due to all that ambiguity that Visa/Mastercard just consider all that as incest and has a scorched earth policy in place which Patreon follows (mostly)
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There are ways around anything, Patreon is just being either lazy or cheapskates. Literally, why should they care? just find a country that doesn't give a shit, found a mailbox there and invoice... Visa & Mastercard and all banks don't give a shit about morality, if they did there would be no Mob/Syndicate/Cartels... The financial sector are the biggest pimps/whores of our society.
Just think, you can't get a paycheck anymore, your employer gives your earnings to the bank then you have to pay service charges to use your hard earned government taxed, bank drained leftovers...
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Double standards. Incest is very taboo in some fairly powerful circles so they wanna give the impression that they take a stand against it.
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A bunch of kids running through the Castle grounds or attending classes is not that interesting. The time skips are perfet to show how the MC becomes part of the family and how their relationships have evolved through the years.
Now that he's a man he can start to defend and conquer other lands. A young twink fighting the Gauld would be hilarious.
Talking about war and the MC. I pick axes as my weapon but after the first sex scene I think I'm gonna restart the game and pick battle hammer this time
What I don't like so far is how the MC is turning into another Chosen One. I'm talking about his magic affinity scene. It reminds me of Ataegina, another fantasy game in which the MC is a Gary Stu. Being an orphan and raising to be a Royal Guard is perfect, he doesn't have to be the son of some legendary God reborn among mortals.
The chosen one trope cheapens any feat accomplished by your characters.
Now that he's a man he can start to defend and conquer other lands. A young twink fighting the Gauld would be hilarious.
Talking about war and the MC. I pick axes as my weapon but after the first sex scene I think I'm gonna restart the game and pick battle hammer this time
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The chosen one trope cheapens any feat accomplished by your characters.
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