VN Ren'Py I Was a Teenage Vampire Rebuild [v0.7.2] [FatalMasterpiece]

[SerHawkes]

So... on a whim this caught my eye and decided to try it...

Issue 1: Text. Half of it is solid, half of it needs fixing. Certainly some measure of elements to make it all the same instead of having lines such as this for example.

Savannah: "I want your dick."
MC: i will let you have it.

Simply fix really. And while I may be a proofreader for a couple of avns, I ain't fully interested in adding another to the list, unless it's actually needed.

Issue 2: Artwork. While there is a part of me that does believe the Dev is being legit with this being used with shaders essentially, there is part of me that has this notion that parts are used with AI that are slightly altered. Some of the scenes just look slightly 'off' to me. Could simply be just me though. Still, it is well done so far.

Overall though, while I certainly semi hope for tags such as harem and pregnancy to be added, storywise it's pretty well done. Characters are well done and crafted, cliche in that type high school clique vibe, but still solid. If things get cleaned up text wise, and the story keeps being a strong point, this game could be a nice little gem. Diamond in the rough right now but has promise.

 

[RGMedia]

Savannah: "I want your dick."
MC: i will let you have it.

Hilarious because neither of these lines even exist within the game.

 

[SerHawkes]

Hilarious because neither of these lines even exist within the game.

It was means for an example for the text issue. But apparently some are skilled issued in understanding that.

 

[Stakos]

does anyone have the save file of Crissy sex scene in her home after helping her when school was closed by police? Preferable with all stats maxed out using the walktrough. It keeps crashing me when animation starts and i can't skip this scene

I second that! For some reason the game freezes in that scene

 

[Orlox]

Just published version 0.7.2 on my page.

• Fixed a number of dialogue typos.
• Retouched select image frames to improve visual consistency.
• Resolved bugs affecting UI elements like the map area and menus.
• Updated dialogue fonts for better readability: main dialogue and inner monologue now have distinct, clearer styles.
• Rebuilt the Jodie diner bathroom scene (Day 3) as a test of a new format. The scene is now fully narrative driven, removing the previous multiple choice menu. This may become the standard for other intimate scenes in the game.
• Added opacity slider for the text box UI (thanks to Moonbox).
• New dialogue font options: choose between comic or pixel styles under settings.
• Added a new Chrissy school investigation scene (Day 3).
• Included an experimental Macintosh build. Note: this version is untested and not officially supported yet.

The rebuilt dinner scene with Jodie is much better. I wasn't a fan of how the sex scenes were basically just a bunch of choices on different camera angles, x-ray, etc. especially since it made them all very similar because the girls didn't really do or say much once the scene started.

With the new version, not only does the scene flow much better without having it constantly stop waiting for you to pick an option, but it also does a better job of showing Jodie's personality than the old version did.

 

[Sith1ord]

It was means for an example for the text issue. But apparently some are skilled issued in understanding that.

Trying to explain away an example that isn't real by deflecting into an veiled insult does seem like a "skilled issued"
Excellent showcase of proofreading abilities too.

I did notice an instance where "MC" was used in place of the name, but overall dialog was acceptable. Scenes seem like a mix of porn logic and someone who watched '80s high school TV/movies more than experienced high school in that era.

 

[Belphegor007]

Models are great, atmosphere is great, characters are fun, plot hooks are interesting, character writing is good, and the style is great but I do have some issues.
I find that some things progress a little too fast, the sex scenes look nice but the dialogue during them are weak, and I'm not super into the choosing between childhood friend, cousin, or sister at the moment because it kind of skirts around it but cousin seems to be the one that makes the most sense but this is a just a minor one.
I do very much look forward to how this game progresses.

 

[SerHawkes]

Models are great, atmosphere is great, characters are fun, plot hooks are interesting, character writing is good, and the style is great but I do have some issues.
I find that some things progress a little too fast, the sex scenes look nice but the dialogue during them are weak, and I'm not super into the choosing between childhood friend, cousin, or sister at the moment because it kind of skirts around it but cousin seems to be the one that makes the most sense but this is a just a minor one.
I do very much look forward to how this game progresses.

Kinda agree on that. The sex scenes and their build up seem a bit quick. With Jodie the school slut, sure. Same with the girl we helped liquidate her homework from her locker. As well as Savannah. Then again that mostly sells for AVNs.

The Sister/Best Friend could be something if there was bit more build up. Like 2-3 days in we already are doing something?

 

[Just Jericho]

The Sister/Best Friend could be something if there was bit more build up. Like 2-3 days in we already are doing something?

Why would that be weird? The context for the scene is well established with all the teasing Clarissa has gotten from other girls so it's not like the scene was out of nowhere. Besides, it was a pretty tame and plausible scene. Just a couple horny teenagers experimenting out of a perfectly healthy combination of mutual attraction, curiosity, and peer pressure!

I don't see anything wrong with the pacing of the sex scenes and I don't see any reason to drag things out just for the sake of dragging things out either.

 

[Belphegor007]

The Sister/Best Friend could be something if there was bit more build up. Like 2-3 days in we already are doing something?

That one had proper build up, but maybe the park scene could have went a little longer. The main issue with that scene was her complete lack of sex education because she should still know how basic male anatomy works.

 

[SerHawkes]

That one had proper build up, but maybe the park scene could have went a little longer. The main issue with that scene was her complete lack of sex education because she should still know how basic male anatomy works.

I mean... sure... But same time though, I don't think her focus on dicks is her main past time. She's more focused on her basketball team, so I'll give her a bit of leeway.