VN Ren'Py Imperial Chronicles [v0.11] [Lazy Monkey]

[Ayhsel]

Why the fuck can a Mage Elis still not do anything even half as dope as this man.

LET ME BURN (elven) FORESTS TO THE GROUND MAN.

Because it will trivialize a lot of the content in his path, requiring the other paths to have huge differences to make up for it.

 

[GibboBtw]

Because it will trivialize a lot of the content in his path, requiring the other paths to have huge differences to make up for it.

Then what is the point of even giving the option to have him be a Mage. If he's never going to be able to do anything that a mage can. Again, as I've said before. It just feels like by far the most wasted class when in comparison to the other two.

 

[GarudoSCHE]

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So... She burned our wife as she promised?

 

[lesnO56]

Snake 1 cass/Conrad (Cass was a tool so I think conrad is the snake) snake 2 Mother/Alina (mostly going Alina cuz you never get the option of killing mother and the snakes should be killable), snake 3 something to do with the mages, I don't think it's Elin, she's too on MC side, not trying to control or keep secrets, maybe she changes but for now I don't think we've seen the 3rd snake yet.

It seems like the people in the family are connected to the snakes they are not the snakes themselves. Lia is not on the board, she seems more like the one who has a general view, she knows everything going on

...or we haven't been given the chance to kill them YET.
Snakes are very important characters in the plot.
If one snake is definitely Cass, then there's a chance the others are Mother or Elin.
We just haven't been given the chance to kill them YET.

And yes, Alaina could be considered a snake; her influence on the plot is overmuch.
Conrad is definitely not a snake, simply because his plot significance is less than that of Cass and Alaina. He clearly acts as a "catch-up" for Alaina's ALREADY accomplished plot deeds.

 

[lesnO56]

So... She burned our wife as she promised?

Highly unlikely.
We saw the wives in visions after the protagonist's children had grown up.

 

[Echo2]

Filipis I played your remastered version for a few minutes. Disclaimer:

• English is not my first language, so take whatever I say with a pinch of salt
• I don't understand a single word of Russian, so I can't compare your English version to the original in Russian.

The English is much better in your version than in the original. I can't even imagine the amount of time and effort it took to do it. Kudos!

So far I noticed the following errors or things I'd state differently:

• There seems to be a Ren'Py mod installed; it popped up the first time I booted the game.
• & → and (e.g. Val: [...] consolidating & centralizing [...], and Val: [...] days & nights).
• Val: And, out of spite - or sheer hubris - had all the imperial [...] → And, out of spite or sheer hubris, had all the imperial (italic inside dashes is too much emphasis IMO).
• Val: [...] So much so, that few even believed [...] →
  • Few even believed
  • A few even believed
  • So much so that a few even believed
  • So much so that some even believed (if the people who believed something are few in number (1, 2 or 3), I don't think it would warrant the use of "so much so").
• Val: [...] large army of malcontents from all across the Empire →
  • large army of malcontent people from all across the Empire
  • large army of dissatisfied people from all across the Empire
• There are quotation marks at the end of some dialogue boxes (e.g. Val: [...] large army of malcontents from all across the Empire." and Val: [...] acquiesce to this future.")
• Val: Thousands of swords and spears pierced thousands more bodies → Thousands swords and spears pierced thousands bodies
• Val: The Emperor was soon found mortally wounded in his chambers by his youngest son Regis - who blamed his elder brother for the patricide → The Emperor was mortally wounded in his chambers. He was found in his death throes by his youngest son, Regis, who accused his elder brother of patricide
• Val: And with the support of a small group of nobles threw him into the dungeon, overnight becoming the closest thing to the crown of the new Emperor → With the support of a small group of nobles, Regis threw his elder brother into the dungeon and almost became the new Emperor overnight
• Val: The trial went as expected: Regis condemned his brother to death, depriving him of his right to the throne according to the ancient laws → A trial was held and his brother was found guilty. In accordance to the ancient laws, Regis stripped him of his right to the throne and sentenced him to death
• Val: A vast majority of the nobles and clergy →
  • The vast majority of the nobility and clergy
  • The vast majority of nobles and clerics

Please let me know which suggestions you found acceptable and which ones you didn't, so I can learn what to filter out next time