FYI you forgot to capitalize a ton of I's in the new public update, and a few pronoun mistakes like he's vs his and such. Recommend typing your script up in Word or something before copying it into the .rpy, the autocorrect should catch most basic things like that. Or have a GPT proofread what it's censorship will allow.
Also while I'm here and a minor gripe I had while playing, I suggest using different who_color for the characters so who's speaking stands out more, i.e. a golden color for Sylvia: define s = Character("Sylvia", who_color="#d8bb5a")
Also, also, here's a quick little dialogue box opacity mod for anyone who wants it. Just a crude gui files replacement, but doesn't touch the main game script so should be update compatible unless Dev changes GUI stuff. You can diff check the files to see what the changes are if you wanna incorperate it Dev.
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