A few things.
1) Midget MC showing no signs of puberty. Seriously?!?
OK, I understand that the game is made for a specific age group, and MC appearance is supposed to attract potential customers. The problem is with those who turned 14 (15?) years ago - it's hard to step into the shoes of a kid. Yes, I know, his appearance doesn't deserve the [shota] tag.
2) The game leads to excessive use of the [CTRL] key. Not only is the [text speed] parameter set to 50% by default (reading for dummies?), but the author also uses renpy.pause(#, hard=True).
https://f95zone.to/threads/independent-horizons-v-0-2-0-swampystudio.204329/post-13633677
That's why you have to click each text 2-3 times, and the beginning of the chapter has a timer set to ??? 9999999? (I don't check the script) Seriously? ... not funny!
3) A light or medium-light case of FFS.
(FancyFontSyndrome)
[irony] The text is still readable, which means the author did it wrong - FFS is used to emphasize the uniqueness and depth of a masterpiece, if it is still readable... something went wrong!
4) Heavy, lenghty writing. Nothing extreme, just too many words for a "fuck 'em all" VN, under other circumstances it's not a bad thing.
5) The name cannot be longer than 7 characters. Once again - seriously?!
I guess that a longer name messes up the text formatting in some places. I don't know if it's a problem, maybe where you live no one uses long names (yes, there are such places).