Ren'Py Independent Horizons [v0.4.0] [SwampyStudio]

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By the way, a small mistake in the game; although I used a different player name, the first message from Emily used the default name Tom.
The final version of the game looks very good, the story seems to reach interesting points. Good luck.
 
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Regarding the error people were reporting when trying to call Pauline...

I opened the phone when there was instruction text on the screen, saying to check messages from pauline and if none, open the phone and call, and when opening the phone when there is text during that scene, the phone button is not inter-actable.

Closing the phone and clicking through the screens in that scene until the text is NOT on the screen allowed the phone icon in the text section to actually be clickable.
 
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I didn't record everything prior to the video call with Pauline and Hannah, but there were a number of these same type errors then, including 2 hard-coded references to "Mrs. Cruz" and "tenant" respectively.

Should be able to search the code for the word "tenant" or the characters names, and make sure they are all variables, if you plan to have the player be able to change them or be called something different.

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Should be "best friend".

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Missing comma, should be "Wait, is that Hannah?"

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He was adopted, in this scene and the next he would be her adopted BROTHER. "Step" only applies if he was the son of one of the marriage partners.

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Not sure if Eula believes in the paranormal, but her dad is dead, he wouldn't be able to reach out to her. If she believes in ghosts or the paranormal (I haven't reached that point in the story) this would make sense. At this point in the story it doesn't because nothing has shown she believes in ghosts.

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Should read: "I don't think you're a bad person."

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Unless Pauline is practicing on the high dive, which we see she's not, this sentence is misleading. A more clear option could be:
"As Pauline, known for her powerful diving starts, heads to the starting platform, Hanna stands by the pool with a stopwatch"

That entire sentence is fairly clunky, unless the diving is important to the story it could probably be left out and just say "powerful start" or something similar.

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The "race's" halfway point, which is the wall and used as a turning point. The "pool" halfway point is in the middle of the pool.

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Should read "..a juicy, fat, hotdog.." not 'some'

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Someone else can pick up the others. :)
 
swampystudio

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Ozygator said:
I didn't record everything prior to the video call with Pauline and Hannah, but there were a number of these same type errors then, including 2 hard-coded references to "Mrs. Cruz" and "tenant" respectively.

Should be able to search the code for the word "tenant" or the characters names, and make sure they are all variables, if you plan to have the player be able to change them or be called something different.

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Should be "best friend".

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Missing comma, should be "Wait, is that Hannah?"

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He was adopted, in this scene and the next he would be her adopted BROTHER. "Step" only applies if he was the son of one of the marriage partners.

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Not sure if Eula believes in the paranormal, but her dad is dead, he wouldn't be able to reach out to her. If she believes in ghosts or the paranormal (I haven't reached that point in the story) this would make sense. At this point in the story it doesn't because nothing has shown she believes in ghosts.

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Should read: "I don't think you're a bad person."

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Unless Pauline is practicing on the high dive, which we see she's not, this sentence is misleading. A more clear option could be:
"As Pauline, known for her powerful diving starts, heads to the starting platform, Hanna stands by the pool with a stopwatch"

That entire sentence is fairly clunky, unless the diving is important to the story it could probably be left out and just say "powerful start" or something similar.

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The "race's" halfway point, which is the wall and used as a turning point. The "pool" halfway point is in the middle of the pool.

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Should read "..a juicy, fat, hotdog.." not 'some'

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Someone else can pick up the others. :)
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Hey, I really appreciate this! Thanks, man! I'll make sure to review and update everything. Before releasing the new update, I’ll go through it all from the beginning and simplify the narration so it’s not too lengthy. I did check it before, but I guess I missed quite a lot since my focus was different at the time. For example, it said Ms. Emily instead of Ms. Lily in a specific scene. So, thanks for pointing that out! I’ll definitely consider your feedback in my next review.
 
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YaYa_UnTIN2 said:
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Dev good luck with the game anyway.
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Okay thanks! Hehehe What you said gave me an idea for something new to update next time. :giggle: Oh, right - I forgot that those last images shouldn’t zoom out unless you've checked the hole. Either way, I can't reveal the purpose of these women publicly, as the game is still far from reaching the main story and climax. ;) Also, I’m building up points for each character on every option, so make sure you know what to choose.
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YaYa_UnTIN2 said:
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Dev good luck with the game anyway.
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I believe there is an option to not peep through the hole at all.

And yeah, the way the story went I expect that to be the librarian, and like you I hope she's completely skippable, since there's no telling what STD's she carrying in her mouth or cooch.

Although we could say the same about the spa owner. Unless she uses safe sex, and she probably doesn't, she's a walking STD herself.
 
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Ozygator said:
I believe there is an option to not peep through the hole at all.

And yeah, the way the story went I expect that to be the librarian, and like you I hope she's completely skippable, since there's no telling what STD's she carrying in her mouth or cooch.

Although we could say the same about the spa owner. Unless she uses safe sex, and she probably doesn't, she's a walking STD herself.
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Hi,

"I believe there is an option to not peep through the hole at all"

Maybe there was, but how would I know what it could have been, I might have lucked out and seen some born female lipstick-homo scene, but no, instead I got the BBC unwanted scene. Live and learn. :)

What I meant by options is, to have them set before the game begins.

As in a real option screen or a 4th wall break "content warning" - E.g., Player do you want to see nasty (not in a good way) sluts getting throated by other dudes? No thank you, I'd click that toggle option OFF 100% every time. :D
 
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So what I'm getting from reading comments is this games full of getting cucked and scenes that dont involve the MC, plus a Female character close to the MC that gives dudes happy endings?

Shame because the pictures look great. I really don't get the appeal of voyeurism but too each their own. GL with the game.
 
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