VN Ren'Py Industry Baby [v0.3] [Ekko]

[Maviarab]

Well, have to say, I'm really, really impressed with this one. Excellent stuff from the dev and that chapter ending..hmm...heh.

Definitely looking forward to the next update.

 

[Reniere]

I enjoyed this game

But working on 2games is kinda risky.
Longer dev time and longer hiatus between updates

I would put ruby on-hold to finish this. but what do i know lol

 

[sigvar]

nah, there's no incest tag for a reason. Almost every game has Incest, so having none in this game feels good to me

How about devs stop having the MC living with a "family" type group if they don't want incest?! It's like setting up a porn game in a zoo without bestiality! Why?

 

[Maviarab]

How about devs stop having the MC living with a "family" type group if they don't want incest?! It's like setting up a porn game in a zoo without bestiality! Why?

Because teenagers live on their own alllll the time before becoming young adults...right? They just go through puberty and high school living on their own, making ends meet

 

[Anteron]

Because teenagers live on their own alllll the time before becoming young adults...right? They just go through puberty and high school living on their own, making ends meet

MC just graduated from college in this one, but even then how many can live on their own yet?

 

[sigvar]

Because teenagers live on their own alllll the time before becoming young adults...right? They just go through puberty and high school living on their own, making ends meet

MC just graduated from college in this one, but even then how many can live on their own yet?

Actually, my statement was in general. The dev did give some of the backstory to justify the relationship in this game, quite well, I might add.

I still hold to what I said about so many other games, though.

 

[LordWanze]

Thanks, my guy! We gonna make a lot more until we beat Johny Sins

So can we expect more forced scenes without player input?
Just wanna know if it's time to drop and ignore. Would be a shame tho, like almost all characters.

 

[mike12013]

How about devs stop having the MC living with a "family" type group if they don't want incest?! It's like setting up a porn game in a zoo without bestiality! Why?

I also don't believe that devs should let the MC fuck any girl thats in the game whatsoever. Especially if there's a story to tell in some cases, this isn't one but the general point stands

 

[Anteron]

I also don't believe that devs should let the MC fuck any girl thats in the game whatsoever. Especially if there's a story to tell in some cases, this isn't one but the general point stands

Well, then what's the point of her being in the game, except maybe in passing?

 

[mike12013]

Well, then what's the point of her being in the game, except maybe in passing?

I've been in the process of writing a VN personally, wrote about 70k words (not all dialogue, a lot of is direction for renders), not sure if i'll continue as i've hit a narrative wall, but regardless.

For me, I wanted a more realistic VN, so not every girl was into the MC, the same way as happens in real life, his looks, his personality etc. The other characters, were just to flesh the story out, and give a sense of groundedness. One of his best friends is a female work colleague, she's seen him at his worst mentally, and at his best, she offers support and there's good banter, but no actual chemistry. Another is an important characters sister, based off the overarching narrative, there's no way that A) they'd see each other that way, B) her purpose is to serve as an emotional mirror, they deal with similar situations, she challenges him a lot because of her personality and her motives, but again purely platonic. His boss at work, she protects him for minor indescretions, but won't protect him for going too far. The same as a male set of characters, they keep the world grounded. Just because the females have a vagina doesn't mean the MC is entitled to fuck them, because they're their own people with their own motivations

But that's the story i'm personally telling, this one doesn't feel similar to that (only played chapter 1 so far), so i get your grievance, but in general sense a platonic, female character is incredibly useful to have around

 

[Koltovincent]

Well I just caught up with the game, I have to say it is definitely interesting. Chapter two did feel like a divergence from chapter one. Beth felt like she came out of nowhere and while I do like her and usually like the "childhood friend to lovers" trope, having her declare love/feelings for the MC in the same episode is a little hard to take. And it did feel weird for Mariam to also develop feelings within a week for the MC as well, granted I can see him filling the void of her insecurities but still it feels like each girl introduced falls too quickly for the MC.

I'm 50/50 on the MC using everyone to quickly climb the company ladder and become the top of the AV industry. I feel it is within his character but I would like more build up to his ruthless side so we can see how he would be able to do it. And maybe show more if he is actually using Mariam or if he cares, or in a twisted sense he cares but will use everyone to ensure they both get to the top. Maybe its just me but its hard to see how the MC goes from getting several warnings he needs to change to survive the industry to making plans and manipulating people to move up.

What I will say is the entire courtroom scene in Chapter 2 was a very well done piece of work. From start to finish there was no clear sign they were actually filming an AV and out of context someone would think it was an actual court case and I loved it. Keeping the characters in dialogue for the actual lewd scene and continuing to role off Lawyer sayings the entire time was beautiful and well done.

Finally, going by the patreon post regarding polling the next game... Its a rough choice. My personal preference would be for one game to be the focus, as splitting time leads to major gaps in Dev updates for both games. That being said the developer has said he has a favorite, and I wouldn't want him to get burnt out by being forced away from his preferences. I will definitely follow along for Industry Baby at the very least, I think chapter 2's later half proved enough to follow along, even if I think it didnt match up to what we saw from the MC from chapter 1.

Edit: Can't beat an unfinished game

 

[Prvrt Ekko]

Who's the cute blonde with the glasses at the end?

Gonna name her in the next update

 

[HiHaHo]

Gonna name her in the next update

like you don't know the name off a character you've already written

 

[Prvrt Ekko]

like you don't know the name off a character you've already written

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I already named all of the primary love interests on Patreon before even releasing the pilot episode, but I know some people haven't seen it. But the good thing about it is we're having a continuation of the Industry Baby update this time. More face lickin' for me

 

[Maccabbee]

"Beat the game"

 

[Simpgor]

I feel like I missed something in the exchange with MC, Heather, Eri, Miriam and Mrs Collins?

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Like did the dude have some sort of vietnam flashback? Did he narrate the whole flashback to the people in the office? Unless i missed something i feel like the writing quality took a noticeable nosedive? Like i get tsundere needs to be communicated but it was done in a more believable and interesting way with regina so why is it done so poorly with the 2nd tsundere?


it makes even less sense because miriam saw her unjustly getting up in MC bussiness after the first shoot and even comes to "defend him" but a few days later in the office she is perfectly happy letting her insult the MC but the second he says 2 factually correct lines she gives him a judgemental look?

 

[Maccabbee]

I feel like I missed something in the exchange with MC, Heather, Eri, Miriam and Mrs Collins?

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Like did the dude have some sort of vietnam flashback? Did he narrate the whole flashback to the people in the office? Unless i missed something i feel like the writing quality took a noticeable nosedive? Like i get tsundere needs to be communicated but it was done in a more believable and interesting way with regina so why is it done so poorly with the 2nd tsundere?


it makes even less sense because miriam saw her unjustly getting up in MC bussiness after the first shoot and even comes to "defend him" but a few days later in the office she is perfectly happy letting her insult the MC but the second he says 2 factually correct lines she gives him a judgemental look?

A flashback is just a memory. It can be just vividly remembering the past in a normal way, or from PTSD, or even from drugs. This was normal proper usage.

Also, if you're looking for people to behave the same all the time, in a fully rational manner, then you must not know too many people...

 

[Simpgor]

A flashback is just a memory. It can be just vividly remembering the past in a normal way, or from PTSD, or even from drugs. This was normal proper usage.

Also, if you're looking for people to behave the same all the time, in a fully rational manner, then you must not know too many people...

The 'nam flashback was partially a joke, I figured that it was just to give us (the reader) context but.... why was the MC in the wrong? Its not even about acting in a fully rational manner? Its just poorly (comparatively) written due to a lack of internal consistency.

When the MC apologized for the coffee stuff with regina he had done the following: had coffee poured on him without his knowledge or consent, he stormed off mid shoot, he stormed back in shoot and caused the entire production to shift from generic everyday porn to cheating bitch "unexpected/refreshing" (directors words) porn

When MC apologized to heather: he is insulted by her multiple times with absolutely no work relevant reasoning, he says he was expecting this and that he isnt wrong for being angry with her

 

[Maccabbee]

The 'nam flashback was partially a joke, I figured that it was just to give us (the reader) context but.... why was the MC in the wrong? Its not even about acting in a fully rational manner? Its just poorly (comparatively) written due to a lack of internal consistency.

When the MC apologized for the coffee stuff with regina he had done the following: had coffee poured on him without his knowledge or consent, he stormed off mid shoot, he stormed back in shoot and caused the entire production to shift from generic everyday porn to cheating bitch "unexpected/refreshing" (directors words) porn

When MC apologized to heather: he is insulted by her multiple times with absolutely no work relevant reasoning, he says he was expecting this and that he isnt wrong for being angry with her

They had that kind of teasing antagonistic thing in the past (think Tsundere) that developed into a full relationship. They each blamed the other for the "break up" caused by her having to move away. Nobody ever cleared the air or explained things.

Some of the insults are just anger expressing itself badly, others are more joking. It's hard to get context while just reading it.

The apologies are for storming off set. That is a big work no-no, and Heather is his temporary boss. Mariam is also highly dependent on this job, and him risking their job by walking off like that justifiably had her upset also, particularly as he's promised her to guarantee their success (which is one of the many things that makes no sense, but it's porn logic, so...).

The fact is, MC handled the Regina bullshit initially in a very unprofessional manner, but made up for it with the off-script response (which was also jeopardizing his position in the company, but it worked out).

 

[Simpgor]

They had that kind of teasing antagonistic thing in the past (think Tsundere) that developed into a full relationship. They each blamed the other for the "break up" caused by her having to move away. Nobody ever cleared the air or explained things.

Some of the insults are just anger expressing itself badly, others are more joking. It's hard to get context while just reading it.

The apologies are for storming off set. That is a big work no-no, and Heather is his temporary boss. Mariam is also highly dependent on this job, and him risking their job by walking off like that justifiably had her upset also, particularly as he's promised her to guarantee their success (which is one of the many things that makes no sense, but it's porn logic, so...).

The fact is, MC handled the Regina bullshit initially in a very unprofessional manner, but made up for it with the off-script response (which was also jeopardizing his position in the company, but it worked out).

Yes but MC is not apologizing to heather for walking out of the set..... he already did that with the director and mrs collins

the apology to heather is done because.....she insulted him multiple times unprovoked? that MC had the gall to say she does this all the time (she does)?

WHY is the MC in the wrong with Heather?

Edit: For proof that he is not apologizing for the coffee incident he has a realization that he (during the current interaction) was being unprofessional.... which he already realized about the coffee