VN Ren'Py Abandoned Inevitable Relations [v0.1b] [KinneyX23]

[KinneyX23]

Don't worry, that I can promise, as I said in the dev thread, she won't be a cock hunting whore, she won't be raped or coerced into anything, that clearly isn't consensual. She won't be mind controlled, everything is coming from her own (or yours, depends on the point of view) initiative.

 

[RDObj]

Generally not into lesbians but this seems like it could be a very interesting and novel story. I like the looks you've gone for, both women seem to have realer bodies instead of this small waist watermelon chested stuff that lots of times creeps in here. Also like that you've stated it won't have rape/whore aspect that some of this type of content usually has. Only thing I twinged on was how the kid just got back home after being gone and they're like lets leave him for the weekend for some us time. Like hasn't that been the case for all this time already? But that's probably more a personal issue of mine and I could see how it might even fit like if Alex is somewhat jealous or nervous in terms of Charlie.

You said this is based on a story you wrote - any chance you could post it too?

 

[KinneyX23]

Yeah, I noticed that, the timing of the trip is a little off, but I will change that in the next update. Because, there are some other things, I'm not that happy with. In Terms of Alex, jealousy is maybe the wrong word, it's more like she is concerned, that Beth will dive in too deep, in order to stop anything between Charlie and Eva, that isn't a relationship brother and sister would normally have.
It wasn't in the original story, but I maybe add some days or weeks between the homecoming and the trip. Which leads me to the sharing of the story, I will share it one day, but for now I won't. The reason for that is, that the story takes some important turns, that are crucial and would give away too much of the possibilities. Sorry about that.

By the way, I know I said you will have the Chance to Change her Looks, during the game, but this actually got me thinking.

The mom's haircut is really weird. Especially for a cop. Other than that though I think it's great so far.

So, I played around a little with her style in general, changed her hair from the "Chace Hair" to the "Rochelle Ponytail", gave her little studs in her ears and one small, but very important detail, I totally forgot about before. A ring!
Also, she has a belly piercing now, but I'm not sure about that.

I think she turned out to be amazing, and much better than before. What do you guys think?




Oh yeah, here's a preview for Eva. Although she doesn't look the way I wanted her to, I definitely won't change anything now:

 

[JR81]

I think she turned out to be amazing, and much better than before. What do you guys think?

Please lose the belly piercing. She's not a teenager. Furthermore those things are ridiculous. IMHO that is

 

[RDObj]

Which leads me to the sharing of the story, I will share it one day, but for now I won't. The reason for that is, that the story takes some important turns, that are crucial and would give away too much of the possibilities. Sorry about that.

I get it - something to look forward to down the line. Like watching the movie and then reading the book. Usually it's easier to enjoy the movie if you watch it before the book cause they rarely live up to the books that spawned them.

Re the old hair I figured you were maybe going for a Detective Belker kind of thing (just for a woman instead).

But the new one looks good too and honestly, for what it's worth, at the end of the day it's your idea and concept so the character needs reflect how you envisioned her when writing her tale not just what others think based on their kinks, otherwise you maybe won't connect with the character as well and you lose motivation in creating the work.

 

[KinneyX23]

I get it - something to look forward to down the line. Like watching the movie and then reading the book. Usually it's easier to enjoy the movie if you watch it before the book cause they rarely live up to the books that spawned them.

Exactly!

But the new one looks good too and honestly, for what it's worth, at the end of the day it's your idea and concept so the character needs reflect how you envisioned her when writing her tale not just what others think based on their kinks, otherwise you maybe won't connect with the character as well and you lose motivation in creating the work.

I know, but I wasn't really happy, with how she turned out. Alex is exactly like I wanted her to be, but with the main char, that wasn't the case. Same can be said for Eva, but although she isn't what I imagined, she turned out to be gorgeus (at least in my opinion). Beth still needs a little bit of tweaking, but I like her a hell of lot more now than before. I don't know yet, if I'm redoing all renders, with the new Looks, or just include the changed appearance later on in the game.

 

[dunhill]

Thank you for your input, although I'm not really sure, where I keep breaking the 4th wall. I did it once, as a joke.
As for the pacing, believe me, it's not going fast, the main Story arc didn't even start. For now it's only the prologue (and not the full one, it's not even close to be finished), but that scene with Alex is going to be an important one, so it needed to be added right at the start. In the future I want to extend the dialogues, that take place before that scene and change some of the writing, too. I know it's not the best at the Moment, but that the reason, why the version number is so low for now.

While you're talking about the writing being cringe, I'm greatful for any input, tips and helpful advice I can get. Just because, the game will be free all the way, I'm not looking, to make any money out of it, although it would be nice, it's not my main motivation behind making it.

but like in the beginning where mom has to answer the door (i like how there is 3 different options) the 1st one was to mess with him (which i did like and was funny) but it would've been cool if you could drag out that scene a little more like Charlie thoughts and maybe give another 2option within that main option... for example Charlie POV would be his mom is inviting him to a 3way with her and his step mom, Charlie would be thinking is this real or is his mom messing with him then he start to think about it (then at that moment you can give 2options to Charlie: option 1 is stand behind the couch, option 2 is stay there and drool) then from Beth POV if option1 was chosen the game would proceed exactly as it did or if option 2 was selected Beth would see Charlie popping a boner and then is given 2options (option1 ignore it or option2 make fun of him).... also later on the day after work when Alex ask what happened you can also choose to tell her about Charlie boner (if selected the choice to tell her you told him she was "naked")

something like that will not affect the main story of the game but help pace the game to the player, also give more options which make the game seem much bigger and gives the player more freedom (or the illusion of more freedom in the game)... again i know this is still an early build and not expect too much, and you still got to polish the game and was going to do exactly what i suggested.... its your game and i'm looking forward to the next release :extremelyhappy::eazyHype::eazyHype::eazyHype:

 

[KinneyX23]

I want to extend the scenes in the beginning, the option to mess with him, in some aspects even like you suggested. But if it comes to a POV of Charlie, then I have to disappoint, because the game will be completely from Beth's perspective, without any other thoughts, influences or views from anyone else. Think of it as a normal novel, with an I perspective.

Extending the scenes will be a hard task, because I'm an idiot and now I probably have to redo all the renders. Just because I had to make Eva (or better said the mishap with Eva) and thought I Play around with Daz and Beth. So I changed her hair, her makeup slightly, she got ear studs, gave her a new outfit, and the wedding ring, immediately after the first render (second one of the ones above) I completely fell in love with her "new" looks.
Also I thought about extending the intro of the game, so that it includes a scene with Eva, where she talks with Beth about Charlie. It kind bugs me, that you don't know where Beth is coming from, when she confronts him.

 

[Antonia Timmens]

I want to extend the scenes in the beginning, the option to mess with him, in some aspects even like you suggested. But if it comes to a POV of Charlie, then I have to disappoint, because the game will be completely from Beth's perspective, without any other thoughts, influences or views from anyone else. Think of it as a normal novel, with an I perspective.

Extending the scenes will be a hard task, because I'm an idiot and now I probably have to redo all the renders. Just because I had to make Eva (or better said the mishap with Eva) and thought I Play around with Daz and Beth. So I changed her hair, her makeup slightly, she got ear studs, gave her a new outfit, and the wedding ring, immediately after the first render (second one of the ones above) I completely fell in love with her "new" looks.
Also I thought about extending the intro of the game, so that it includes a scene with Eva, where she talks with Beth about Charlie. It kind bugs me, that you don't know where Beth is coming from, when she confronts him.

Not to be nit-picky or anything, but the wedding ring is normally on the left hand (as my shackle is) and not the right :biggrin:
Love the work so far! Many devs don't put in this subtle reminder......

 

[Muff Diver]

Thanks will give it a try, @KinneyX23 BTW is there a Main Image you want to upload to your Op. All our threads have a main picture.

 

[Krull]

Wish all the best in completing this game , it's something new and intresting.

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[KinneyX23]

Yeah I wanted a main Image to the OP, but thanks to Krull now there is one.
I made one myself, but it shows the new and improved main character, although this could be a hint to the new version. By the way Krull, I really appreciate that banner! Thank you very much.
I added yours to the OP because mine Looks compared to that, pretty bad!

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[Krull]

Yeah I wanted a main Image to the OP, but thanks to Krull now there is one.
I made one myself, but it shows the new and improved main character, although this could be a hint to the new version. By the way Krull, I really appreciate that banner! Thank you very much.
I added yours to the OP because mine Looks compared to that, pretty bad!

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I'll will update it once the game grows with renders and is more set in place , also feel free to let me know if you want specific images added when the time comes.

 

[KinneyX23]

Thanks for the offer, but for now this is enough. Actually more than enough, I think it really suits the color style I was going for in the game.

I hope it's not too much to ask, but would you be so Kind, making me a signature, with this image instead of the one you used for the banner.
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[Yarn]

It's just a start. The main character is perfect not 1 baby, but real woman! Look forward to the sequel. (Look for English for google)

 

[habibo]

So i saw that you changed some pictures does that mean the chicks with the punk hair from the first post are gone? :'(

 

[WBWB]

Please lose the belly piercing. She's not a teenager. Furthermore those things are ridiculous. IMHO that is

She's not a teenager but she is a lesbian. Conforming to June Cleaver standards is already out the window.

 

[pootin]

this game concept is the reason why i still look out for xxx-games. :FeelsGoodMan:
did like the first hairstyle more, because alot of women trying a more punky look after their coming out, especially if the are with a another individualist women.
just hope that the whole thing doesnt end, like always, in a single storyline where the son hero turn the family into his harem.

I like how you made Alex a female, I don't even recall seeing another game where a marriage broke up and the wife turned lesbian, it should make things interesting.

because such games doesnt exist. its against all the rules of porn... sadly.

 

[KinneyX23]

@TechCarmin
All characters are featured in the upcoming version. I know, that there are some names, that aren't linked to any specific character yet, but that is going to change, soon.

@habibo
Most likely, yes. But I'm not 100% sure about that, maybe I will give the player the option to choose, which version of Beth he wants for the game. It should be pretty easy, to just redo the renders, with a different hair only, so that wouldn't be such a big problem, but if I'm going to do it like that, is a question I'm asking myself right now.

@WBWB
Just to clarify, she is neither a lesbian or a hetero. It's funny, because as soon as someone is in a same sex relationship he/she is immediately marked as either gay or a lesbian. But Beth is neither, she is bisexual.

@pootin
Oh it can be a harem, if you want it to, at least that's my plan. Just not like the typical harem, you'll see in so many other games. It's more like the other way around.



Like I said, I thought about expanding the intro, with a Scene, where Beth and Eva talk about Charlie. This Scene is almost finished, and will be included before he Returns home.

 

[pootin]

@KinneyX23 no i'am not really into this harem thing, its too common. but a female protagonist with a harem of females is a bit more unique.
hehe bisexual (straight rule for females), this is what i meant. no gay female characters.
but no offence, its just my little opinion. your game is not bad anyway & art is good too. will watch how it will end.