Kind Nightmares
I think one minor correction I would like is ch.3 Nate and Lena scene, is just adding the first part of talking about not coming in between them, but most importantly the reveal and reaction to your dick size. If only Lena is chosen it skips to the sex postion, and you don't get thereveal of how big the dick is and their reaction.
So I think if there is a way to just add the beginning part(may need to remove a line or two) or just the reveal at least, it would work better. Just a suggestion dev, for a minor change if you can. If you don't want to, or unsure how to, I understand, just feels like it would improve that scene. So hopefully you take this suggestion, either decision you make, I will understand.
2 minor grammar things I saw:
- On couch late at night with Maria, we ask is she still awake, after saying something she says "no, couldn't sleep", The no should be a yes instead.
-In locker room when we are picking up ashley , we say "...go get ashley..." sounds off when talking to Eric, she is right there I think it should be "take ashley", cause we want to take her from the situation of eric and it would read better.
Also one last question, I seen you say their will be no full transtion for sam, maybe boobs(which would be great), but just curious can a possible chasity cage be added to make him even more reliant on not using his dick. could be a cool additon. Just a question/suggestion.