Ren'Py Abandoned Jay's Lust [v3] [Temptation Games]

[Tryphikik]

Interracial is fine but please a LITTLE bit less stereotyped? Maybe for ONCE a black character who is actually somewhat likable and relatable and not a cartoon? THAT would be a welcome breath of fresh air. Otherwise I have to agree that this feels like the dev trolling for white outrage which would be lame and worst of all boring.

To be fair, part of what a lot of people like about interacial does include the stereotyping because you take an uncultured x and corrupt the cultured y. It isn't really a statement on the actual races or anything like that, its just because that idea is sexy to some people and stereotyping can help facilitate that idea.

Though yea, obviously this is a bit over the top.

 

[Temptationgames]

@Temptationgames, thanks for the initial version. It gave me a good chuckle. I guess at first, the jarring-ness of the language (probably first set of dialogue before Jay returns to his apartment) was a little off-putting, and there was a bit of a disconnect/feeling of caricature, but it kind of grew on me.

I kind of hope that you could keep the "outrageous" aspects of the game in the game, though probably accessible only through certain path-ing/choices within the game (so as not to offend the more sensitive members of our community).

The entire outrageous premise of this game and its narration, I think, adds to its charm, and gives it more umph to fall into the category of what I would label as more slapstick. I think, if you wanted to walk the tight line of toning it down, you might end up sacrificing some of the silliness/humor, and it might become more serious of a game, i.e. like Jacob's rebound.

Thanks for the feedback. My aim was to make a game that is arousing with some humour.

My main aim for the next two versions is to introduce some more characters to the game.

I am going to reread all the feedback (good and bad) and try and work out what people liked and what they didnt. I will then make an attempt to adjust things. Anyway version 3 will not be out till well into January.

 

[Temptationgames]

Please don't :teary: You're hitting a couple of my favorite fetishes.

1000+ agree with CookieMonster.

Feel free to message me and give me some ideas on where you would like the game to go.
Or even better become a patron?

 

[Temptationgames]

To be fair, part of what a lot of people like about interacial does include the stereotyping because you take an uncultured x and corrupt the cultured y. It isn't really a statement on the actual races or anything like that, its just because that idea is sexy to some people and stereotyping can help facilitate that idea.

Though yea, obviously this is a bit over the top.

I have to agree with your summation of interracial games/scenes/porn. I dont think I have gone too over the top.

 

[Temptationgames]

Oh God. I'm not trying to be that one black guy that whines, but man, c'mon. Exaggeration is cool and all, but 'You ain't even close to them bizz-ness area'. What?

I am interested to know if you have played the latest version and what you think of the dialogue?

 

[SholBlerk]

Version 3 is out. -»

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But there's no $20+ patrons, so maybe we will have to wait a few weeks to have it.

 

[Temptationgames]

That was the beta version. Bugs fixed.

Version 3 is now out.

 

[mikelinez]

Cool! Look forward to trying it.

 

[SholBlerk]

It is now available for $6+ patrons. ==»

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[mikelinez]

V3

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[User_10739]

Updated OP to V3, thanks @mikelinez

 

[Exsa]

My feedback suggestion and ect for this game:

First of feedback: in beginning art is pretty good but later on game quality of art drops down a lot.
Scene with first girl and mc art is good but for first scene it bit....how to put it? Unrealistic? I mean that even h-games usually take some time before public fuck.
For my taste story is bit too stereotypical interracial story by showing white girl big black dick, girl instantly turns total slut but this is only my opinion

Suggestions:
First thing i notice after starting is that there is no sound or music it would be nice add something. Personally i don't like playing games with no sound.

Try to make art quality same for all scenes, yes it's a lot work but in opinion worth of it. Otherwise, it will end like Roundscape Anorexia which it totals mix of different art styles.

0.3 was my first test of this game.

 

[xmilteach]

Thx..

 

[Elyngas]

Hey, I just played your game, I enjoyed it until the MC shared the girl with his friend, after that I just skipped to the end to see the art (which is very good ) I personally dislike sharing, so I would have appreciated an option to avoid it ^^ Also, I agree with some of previous messages, on that while Jay's way of talking was fun at the start, it grew annoying quite soon :/ and the girls reactions are unrealistic, I personally know no women who would be happy about someone whistling at her or grabbing his cock in front of her... Maybe you could make different paths for those who (like me) don't like to share or to treat women to badly (there's a difference between treating a woman like a slut or like a toy)
Now, I must insist that I'm not saying all that just to be negative or just to criticize, I'm hoping that you could take in account what I said in the future, because I think your game can be really good, just not for my tastes if it stays the way it is ^^
PS : maybe you already changed things after the scene with the other guy, and I missed it, if it's the case, I apologize because I couldn't bring my self to continue until that far... If you did, than maybe you could just add an option when your friend call in order to decide if you want him to come over or not Actually, putting more choices for the fetishes of a scene is good idea (I wouldn't mind not seeing some things if it means skipping fetishes I don't like)
Anyway, I wish you the best in the future of your game, and maybe I'll come around to play it again in a few updates

 

[Grozar]

Maybe you could make different paths for those who (like me) don't like to share or to treat women to badly (there's a difference between treating a woman like a slut or like a toy)

This is what i want to say.

 

[Zippity]

This game was a complete waste of my time... It uses extreme over the top takes on stereotype visuals, dialogue, personalities, and behavior... It is bordering on both being a bit racist as well as sexist in it's portrayal of a oversexualized black man living in the gang filled streets of New York City, who has a very specific racial list of women he just wants to ruin sexually... And the women in the game don't act or behave in anyway realistically or even in their own best interests... No woman, new to New York, in her right mind, would blindly follow some random guy to his apartment to get a drink of water, by herself, allowing the guy to pocket her cell phone and remove all her money from her purse, and let him literally tear her clothes, and then behave like it's all normal and fine... WAY over the top... I went ahead and posted my review...

 

[User_32285]

This game was a complete waste of my time... It uses extreme over the top takes on stereotype visuals, dialogue, personalities, and behavior... It is bordering on both being a bit racist as well as sexist in it's portrayal of a oversexualized black man living in the gang filled streets of New York City, who has a very specific racial list of women he just wants to ruin sexually... And the women in the game don't act or behave in anyway realistically or even in their own best interests... No woman, new to New York, in her right mind, would blindly follow some random guy to his apartment to get a drink of water, by herself, allowing the guy to pocket her cell phone and remove all her money from her purse, and let him literally tear her clothes, and then behave like it's all normal and fine... WAY over the top... I went ahead and posted my review...

I get your points, but my mother/sister/aunt/nieces never ever treated me the way they do the MC in 90% of the vn/games here and I am fairly sure, it is the same for the majority here (there are allways exceptions ).

My point being if characters in VN/Games acted realisticly, there would maybe be 30 odd people on F95 and no more.

 

[Temptationgames]

My feedback suggestion and ect for this game:

First of feedback: in beginning art is pretty good but later on game quality of art drops down a lot.
Scene with first girl and mc art is good but for first scene it bit....how to put it? Unrealistic? I mean that even h-games usually take some time before public fuck.
For my taste story is bit too stereotypical interracial story by showing white girl big black dick, girl instantly turns total slut but this is only my opinion

Suggestions:
First thing i notice after starting is that there is no sound or music it would be nice add something. Personally i don't like playing games with no sound.

Try to make art quality same for all scenes, yes it's a lot work but in opinion worth of it. Otherwise, it will end like Roundscape Anorexia which it totals mix of different art styles.

0.3 was my first test of this game.

Thanks for the feedback. I accept the art for a few of the later scenes could have been better. I am still finding me feet on which artists I use. I dont think I will be implementing sound soon.

 

[Temptationgames]

Hey, I just played your game, I enjoyed it until the MC shared the girl with his friend, after that I just skipped to the end to see the art (which is very good ) I personally dislike sharing, so I would have appreciated an option to avoid it ^^ Also, I agree with some of previous messages, on that while Jay's way of talking was fun at the start, it grew annoying quite soon :/ and the girls reactions are unrealistic, I personally know no women who would be happy about someone whistling at her or grabbing his cock in front of her... Maybe you could make different paths for those who (like me) don't like to share or to treat women to badly (there's a difference between treating a woman like a slut or like a toy)
Now, I must insist that I'm not saying all that just to be negative or just to criticize, I'm hoping that you could take in account what I said in the future, because I think your game can be really good, just not for my tastes if it stays the way it is ^^
PS : maybe you already changed things after the scene with the other guy, and I missed it, if it's the case, I apologize because I couldn't bring my self to continue until that far... If you did, than maybe you could just add an option when your friend call in order to decide if you want him to come over or not Actually, putting more choices for the fetishes of a scene is good idea (I wouldn't mind not seeing some things if it means skipping fetishes I don't like)
Anyway, I wish you the best in the future of your game, and maybe I'll come around to play it again in a few updates

Putting choices for the fetishes would be ideal. But the sharing with his friend is pretty important to how the story proceeds.

 

[Temptationgames]

This game was a complete waste of my time... It uses extreme over the top takes on stereotype visuals, dialogue, personalities, and behavior... It is bordering on both being a bit racist as well as sexist in it's portrayal of a oversexualized black man living in the gang filled streets of New York City, who has a very specific racial list of women he just wants to ruin sexually... And the women in the game don't act or behave in anyway realistically or even in their own best interests... No woman, new to New York, in her right mind, would blindly follow some random guy to his apartment to get a drink of water, by herself, allowing the guy to pocket her cell phone and remove all her money from her purse, and let him literally tear her clothes, and then behave like it's all normal and fine... WAY over the top... I went ahead and posted my review...

Thanks for the feedback. I dont think it is racist in my opinion. I have answered some of those allegations earlier on this thread.