Hi Big T.
First of all not bad. Your agem has a lot of potential but there are some problems and the biggest one, what a lot of people already have mentioned, is grammar. You need a proofreader ASAP. Otherwise it will draw off a lot of potential fans, people who might subscribe to your patreon. And tbh I couldn't understand a few sentences at all.
Sandbox at the beggining is bad, it's very easy to get lost. I know you've added later teleportation but you could make it to be available from the beggining. It would help a ton.
While we are at sandbox. Make the return arrow to be in one of the corners (having it in different sides was miss leading sometimes) and with a more distinct color, orange with a black outline for an example. A lot of times I couldn't see the arrow to go back becouse it was blending in too much (especialy in showers).
Even though I had minimal amount of points for optional quests it wasn't crossed off, It looked like it was still active for some reason.