I liked your writing. Some of the details were a bit strange, for example i can't imagine an orc saying " doinkies-boinkies " without laughing, but the scenario fits the game. In my opinion, the length of the story was nice too: enough to contain hot details but didn't feel bloated or too short either. And i'm with you on this discussion too: Sabia has been shown to enjoy most of her scenes even if given the choice she would be more picky with her partners and boundaries.I am the writer, thanks for the mention (didn't actually think my work would end up here).
The idea for the orgasm came from the actual game, as Neve states several times that Orcs are so girthy they stimulate a girl just fine if they're into rough pounding. Sabia refuses to comment, showing she's indeed into it, and several of the sex scenes where she gets fucked make her come from the stimulation after a while.
Good job!
It's also good to see Nomo commissioning a short story like this. It shows that he likes the project.