VN Ren'Py Abandoned Kintsugi [v0.1.1] [Mr. Rodrigues]

Jimbog

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The video with the definition of the title is running really slow, my thought is that it has to run much faster for people not to skip by it. Also I waited and the credits finally did run, but again really slow, and then it went to the scene with Anna. Is there something between the credits and the scene meeting Anna?
 
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Mr.Rodrigues

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Another dead father...serial killer strikes again ;):p:LOL:
Hahaha, no no, nothing like that. Their deaths play a major role in the story, but not in that particular way.

wow this is for once a really good name
Thanks! That's an idea for a story that I've been fiddling with for a while now...

There are many games being released this year and many of them promising like yours, I will keep an eye on the next updates.
The tip I give is to focus on a plot that captivates us, because the art is good. A well-developed and strong storyline doesn't need a lot of sex scenes right from the start. The example I give is Man of the house, which was one of the best games in my opinion, where the balance between the scenes and the story was perfect.
From here some updates we can give a better opinion, but it started well. Good luck with the project. :)
Yup, the plot is the main driving force here, there will be fapping scenes, but not gratuitous ones it may hurt my bottom-line later but in the long run, it might be better. I hope...
 

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The video with the definition of the title is running really slow, my thought is that it has to run much faster for people not to skip by it. Also I waited and the credits finally did run, but again really slow, and then it went to the scene with Anna. Is there something between the credits and the scene meeting Anna?
I see... Well I made it that way for a cinematic effect if you pay attention the letter appears synchronized with the background music. What would you think if I made it unskippable on the first run, and disabled it altogether after that?

Yeah... the credits are really slow, I'll rework them...

Yes, an audio/text only scene with black background. Nothing fancy just kind of sets the mood for the next scene.
 

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I'll style my answers in bold and underlined so they are easier to read:

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You are awesome dude, thanks!

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Oh, wow, thanks man! That's a lot to process, hehehe I'll get right back to you!

There, all done, hehehe.
 
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Yup, the plot is the main driving force here, there will be fapping scenes, but not gratuitous ones it may hurt my bottom-line later but in the long run, it might be better. I hope...
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You will have my special attention :giggle:
 

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Yup, that was what I was going for! Glad you liked it!

Hmmmmmmmm... I get what you said about the song, it might not bother me as much because I'm not a native speaker, so my brain sort of "tunes out" lyrics if I'm not paying attention, but I think I can adjust the volume as for it to not be as distracting.
Ahh... that makes total sense.
 
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e-disfunction

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Shouldn't that be "fiancee" and "friends"? (Is "grandfather" ever defined in the game?)
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Man, I did not understand what you meant. At all, hehehe, could you clarify it, please?
I'm not sure what needs asking or saying, so, I'll state/ask a few things and hope I get close to a target that makes sense. (y) (We are probably missing something very simple, so don't let the amount of text below mislead or scare you. ;))

* In adult computer games, using quotation marks on a character often means that person is something understood but not stated--so "landlady and her tenants" actually means "your mother and your sisters" but the game has been censored. (This is one meaning of my "fiancee" and "friends" references.)

* What is so strange, alien, or abnormal that this grandfather is refered to in quotation marks? The quotation marks may refer to a title or pseudo-role that other people don't agree with--like Quentin Tarantino is a "family-friendly film director", Joseph Stalin was the "father of the Soviet peoples", Charles Manson was "just a friendly neighbour", etc. (Your story's "grandfather" might be a space alien that grows and harvests humans as livestock, for example.)

* The quotation marks imply a non-standard meaning that the language can not communicate effectively (unlike standard words and phrases like step-mother, foster-mother, grandmother, godmother, mother-in-law, etc.). So a non-standard "grandfather/mother" might be: a respected elder-leader of the community; or a religious leader; or a person who participated in a particular social event or crisis; or a healer, oracle, or other cultural role; or the eldest patriarch/matriarch of an extended family (or a group that isn't actually a family!); or a designer, creator, or master of a craft; or a statesman or woman; and/or etc. (This is an alternative meaning of my question ... Because your story has a "grandfather", should your main character have: friends or "friends", a fiancee or a "fiancee", is he going home or "going home", etc.?)

Have I hit anywhere near a target that helps you/us understand where our (possible) misunderstandings might be? :)

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Sheikyus

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This is good, I really like it. The music is nice and the characters look good. Keep it up bro!

Btw i think there is a little problem with the music playing in the main menu. I had to lower the volume of the music with the sound bar instead of the music bar.
 

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Never thought I'd get lit with the music in a porn game :KEK: Imma keep my eyes on this, it's pretty good(y)
 

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I'm not sure what needs asking or saying, so, I'll state/ask a few things and hope I get close to a target that makes sense. (y) (We are probably missing something very simple, so don't let the amount of text below mislead or scare you. ;))

* In adult computer games, using quotation marks on a character often means that person is something understood but not stated--so "landlady and her tenants" actually means "your mother and your sisters" but the game has been censored. (This is one meaning of my "fiancee" and "friends" references.)

* What is so strange, alien, or abnormal that this grandfather is refered to in quotation marks? The quotation marks may refer to a title or pseudo-role that other people don't agree with--like Quentin Tarantino is a "family-friendly film director", Joseph Stalin was the "father of the Soviet peoples", Charles Manson was "just a friendly neighbour", etc. (Your story's "grandfather" might be a space alien that grows and harvests humans as livestock, for example.)

* The quotation marks imply a non-standard meaning that the language can not communicate effectively (unlike standard words and phrases like step-mother, foster-mother, grandmother, godmother, mother-in-law, etc.). So a non-standard "grandfather/mother" might be: a respected elder-leader of the community; or a religious leader; or a person who participated in a particular social event or crisis; or a healer, oracle, or other cultural role; or the eldest patriarch/matriarch of an extended family (or a group that isn't actually a family!); or a designer, creator, or master of a craft; or a statesman or woman; and/or etc. (This is an alternative meaning of my question ... Because your story has a "grandfather", should your main character have: friends or "friends", a fiancee or a "fiancee", is he going home or "going home", etc.?)

Have I hit anywhere near a target that helps you/us understand where our (possible) misunderstandings might be? :)

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Hahaha, ok, so now I get it.

And no, not really, well, sort of, let me explain.

Do note that this is a real spoiler and might rob some impact from the storytelling, so if you or anyone else is interested in following the story as it unfolds in the VN's narrative, stop reading.

That being said, I'll try to keep important spoilers to a minimum.

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Sorry, but I can't reveal more without greater spoilers.

Hope I communicated reasonably well, hehe.

Oh, and his fiancee is indeed his fiancee.
 

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Looks good short but nice introduction nice looking models. One to keep an eye on for sure I liked the model of Emiko always nice to see different types of models and not the same reused ones. Good luck with this. (y)
 

Mr.Rodrigues

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Maybe someone can change the tag to the 3dcg, definitely doesn't look like 2d...
Done!

i've two problems with this game

1. Short Prologue(implying that i want more)
2. Why other games don't put that hairstyle to their MC? It's soo cool and fresh and MC doesn't look like a douchebag or a rapist XD
  1. I'll be sure to add more content in a timely manner! ;)
  2. Man, you will not believe how much time I spent trying to find a nice hairstyle for MC! Every HS hairstyle is lame. I literally combined 3 different hairstyles to make it work. I'm really glad you liked it!
  3. Have I mentioned, hairstyle?

This is good, I really like it. The music is nice and the characters look good. Keep it up bro!

Btw i think there is a little problem with the music playing in the main menu. I had to lower the volume of the music with the sound bar instead of the music bar.
Cool, thanks!

Sorry about that, I had to do that in order to play a video and music at the same time while the music kept on going after the video ended.

Never thought I'd get lit with the music in a porn game :KEK: Imma keep my eyes on this, it's pretty good(y)
Hahaha, me neither, glad you liked it!
 

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1. MC name Phil...Really *no name change*
2. MC looks like a Futa with that long hair
3. The Art and Animations style is nice
4. The Story is still not clear



i have to skip this game on point 1 *No Name Change*

P.S Let the Player Choose The Hair Style (this looks afwul)

Any way good luck with this game
 
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1. MC name Phil...Really *no name change*
2. MC looks like a Futa with that long hair
3. The Art and Animations style is nice
4. The Story is still not clear



i have to skip this game on point 1 *No Name Change*

P.S Let the Player Choose The Hair Style (this looks awful)

Anyway good luck with this game
1 - No big deal for a name unless you fap yourself to the idea of a virtual version of yourself banging chicks
2 - You talk like in every other game you played that use the Renpy-system, you were allowed to change the hairstyle of MC...This is not an MMO XD you can barely make "good choice, bad choice and harem choice" XD deal with it...MC is a dude with glasses and long unbrushed hair
3 - Nothing to say
4 - It's a prologue...a short one i can give you that...but it's basically how the story begins...
 

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It's always nice to find a new story driven game, with decent writing and an interesting plot. It's too early to judge, based solely on a prologue, but it looks very promising and I already like Emico's character and how caring she seems to be.
 

Blargher

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Ah ill make sure to be extra careful when I get the chance to rerun with audio. I think it boils down to we're so use to advancing scenes with spacebar or such that when it comes to that kinda thing (credits or the intro thing) we skip accidentally. Its hard to know when we advance things and when it does it, itself. I know some games when an animation is about to happen they'll say like (Dont click next screen for animation) or some kind of indicator. May be a quick "fix" until you find another better way for it.


Also for not being a native English speaker (I'm guessing from your comments about native speaker and such), I'm amazed there werent way more typos or such. I'm so use to finding games here with serious need of a proofreader. I would've guessed you were native English speaker and just had typos. What is your native language if you dont mind me asking?

Either way cant wait for next update! This seems to have a lot of care put into it and thought behind it.
 

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Hahaha, ok, so now I get it.

And no, not really, well, sort of, let me explain.

Do note that this is a real spoiler and might rob some impact from the storytelling, so if you or anyone else is interested in following the story as it unfolds in the VN's narrative, stop reading.

That being said, I'll try to keep important spoilers to a minimum.
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Oh, and his fiancee is indeed his fiancee.
Yup! We found each other. :)

This tool might work for you: :cool:
As the writer, consider how your charcter sees 'Miss/Mrs/Mr ______' and then refer to those people that way. (It's a kind of "show don't tell" story-telling--we get to understand the story's characters by seeing how other people react to them.)

For example, your character sees his friends as friends (not "friends"), sees his fiancee as his fiancee (not "fiancee"), and sees Mr.____ as grandfather. Another character might see him as a "grandfather", or Bob, or "Hey, You!", but the most important person in the story sees his grandfather.

Heck, you can proboably remove the quotes in the OP--because only interested readers will get to understand the mystery of the orphan's grandfather alluded to in the preview. (*And* there are no spoilers anywhere! ;))

Your thoughts?
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