RPGM Ren'Py Laura: Lustful Secrets [Ch. 1 RenPy v0.11 BETA] [Dark Anu]

[kazim23]

Rest of you ?

So start your own title and write the characters however you like. The rest of us understand this is a fantasy VN, and has nothing to do with real life.

Rest of you ? Are you a clan or something ? And did they choose you as a speaker ? I don't think I need to make my own game to criticize something I don't like in a game as a member of the site , past supporter of the Dev and still a potential client for him. Please if you got something to say , say it and we'll have a conversation about it. But this ''then make it yourself ehehehe'' kind of behaviour isn't good for anybody.

 

[kazim23]

I have zero time to waste on you and I could honestly not a give a single solitary fuk about what you think. So do whatever you want and keep crying, but you are now on my ignore list and I won't have to hear it.

Good Day Sir.

Quite hard to believe that someone comes in a forum for fapping and still carrying that level of tension inside of him. I hope you can throw it out with your next ejaculation.

 

[Alexxx888]

This game is changed a lot, thanks to Obranyi and Augee as wrote Dark in his post. So thanks Dark, it was one of the best games but you choose another way to develop it. Thank you Dark and good bye.

 

[TanyaC]

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Version: Chapter 2 - 0.3 - Part 2

Good game, but some things were misplaced.
1. When Jack, the neighbor, asks Emma to help him, if she accepts the meeting it should happen in the afternoon and that never happens because instead of Emma, the scene of Laura following Jack to the cabaret comes in.
2. I followed the help line in the notebook correctly and I couldn't see any of the new content, if we choose to do other things outside of what is written to do it doesn't work, the story follows only what is written in the notebook, which are the tips.
3. The only thing I managed to do with Emma was to stay in the priest's confectionery, nothing more. 4. My game ends with Laura in the church classroom, the 2nd time she appears there, I found this a bit strange because in the previous vs I managed to do a lot of things, and now, I didn't do anything, without the spa event, without Emma's event with her brother on the date with the 4 guys from college... I looked at the photos in the game area, there are tons of things that didn't appear here... so this notepad to know what to do is causing all the new events to bug.

 

[asplly97]

Good game, but some things were misplaced.
1. When Jack, the neighbor, asks Emma to help him, if she accepts the meeting it should happen in the afternoon and that never happens because instead of Emma, the scene of Laura following Jack to the cabaret comes in.
2. I followed the help line in the notebook correctly and I couldn't see any of the new content, if we choose to do other things outside of what is written to do it doesn't work, the story follows only what is written in the notebook, which are the tips.
3. The only thing I managed to do with Emma was to stay in the priest's confectionery, nothing more. 4. My game ends with Laura in the church classroom, the 2nd time she appears there, I found this a bit strange because in the previous vs I managed to do a lot of things, and now, I didn't do anything, without the spa event, without Emma's event with her brother on the date with the 4 guys from college... I looked at the photos in the game area, there are tons of things that didn't appear here... so this notepad to know what to do is causing all the new events to bug.

maybe you downloaded wrong version. their is a lot more content than you played so far.

 

[SpexIhr]

How exactly do I clean "Emmas Room"? I cleaned the first two, but there is no action selection for the other three rooms.
And there are no actions available at the other locations in the city.

 

[Obranyi]

How exactly do I clean "Emmas Room"? I cleaned the first two, but there is no action selection for the other three rooms.
And there are no actions available at the other locations in the city.

You play first release Chapter 2 right?

 

[Userz]

maybe you downloaded wrong version. their is a lot more content than you played so far.

Probably downloaded 0.2 a few months ago and recently played it

 

[TanyaC]

maybe you downloaded wrong version. their is a lot more content than you played so far.

Hello... I didn't download this latest LLS-0.3-pc.
I always play without looking at that little notebook above the screen where it says what to do... and in this version I decided to change and it didn't turn out as expected... I have several saves from the previous version, I removed them from the folder and saved them and started a new game, and the game ended in the church. The second time Laura goes to the students and gives a science class, after that she says after they complain she says that next time she would give an anatomy class something like that about the body, and then that message appears to continue and goes back to the start menu!!!!.
I wanted an explanation from DV about what I mentioned, but I think he's not really interested in providing clarifications about anything... I'm going to play again and do it my way without following the notebook because it's either buggy or out of date.

 

[TanyaC]

I played a few minutes. Here's my thoughts.

Pros:
1. Isometric graphics of the map is refreshing
2. Amount of locations on map shows ability to create a believable world (at least physically)

Cons:
1. Writing is poor - (more later)
2. Proportions of women is off - Kim Kardashian's ass is not a good indicator of a good hot body. Go look at the Olympics athletes in Tokyo if you want to see what perfect female asses should look like. Kim's ass is all fat and plastic surgery, which is gross. It's not natural. Go to reddit /r/gonewild if you still can't figure out. There's no excuse for not knowing what a shapely ass should look like)

Writing is the core of any narrative driven game experiences, such as the ones here in h-games. There's a lot of issues with the writing in this game, I will list them in order of pressing matter.

1. Lack of characterization for wife, daughter, and husband - Who are they? What does wife do? What does daughter do? Where are they living? What kind of neighborhood is it? What does wife want in her life? Is she a homemaker (unemployed leecher)? Is daughter a student? Does she have a job? Does she have a boyfriend? What is wife scared of? What makes her happy? etc. etc. Learn how to do it:

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. Google "How to write a good character"
2. Lack of real meaningful dialog between characters - Biggest examples being the conversation that the MC had with his wife when he told her "Hey babe, without asking you, I am going to have some stranger live in our house". You need more life experiences or watch more TV if you think the way you portrayed that conversation is how real people talk. It's completely bogus
3. Too many side characters - I don't give a shit about the neighbor when you can't even get the 4 characters you have correct: MC, wife, daughter, and Marketing Consultant. Too many characters don't make your game better, well developed characters do.

Overall the writing in this game is just poor. It sounds like someone with no life experiences trying to emulate real life. The first thing that jumped out to me was when the Boss chewing MC out in the office. It's 100% not believable and not how real corporate BS meetings go down (at least here in America where I work).

I have my cons too, but destructive criticism is what has led many DVs to abandon their games.

Getting everything right and doing everything you said in detail is only for DVs with a large team, which is not the case here... when you have a large team, each person takes care of a detail, and when you develop games alone it is hard work and to please both Greeks and Trojans you need to be a master of miracles...

There are handwriting errors, yes, but that is not so worrying, since the game is being offered for free.

As for family, Laura's concern is to be an honest wife, but when you have a shitty husband like hers who is always drunk, tired or worried even during sex, no woman can stand to be without him even in real life and will give in to temptation seeing things that she does not find in her husband. Some paths didn't work out in this game, for example Jack asks Emma for help, she accepts and they arrange a time in the afternoon and that never happens because Laura goes to the cabaret with Jack that afternoon, that was really fucked up... another example is the meeting of the brother with Emma and the 4 guys from school, if it were a Unity game it would be game over, and here it almost does but DV put something in to repeat and not let sex happen with Emma... A lot of strange things but who are we to judge after all the game is neither mine nor yours and if DV wants it that way then so be it.

 

[Piyomon]

The update was ok. That autistic obrayni guy scene was lame as fuck, the dev just included this shit because it must be some guy that spend a lot of money into his game. The sex scenes are getting weirder and sloppy each update... missed some opportunities of good scenes for a lot of girls before the orgy. The Jack path to help Emma is missing or is gonna be included in the next patch? I hope is missed because is really boring to start over the game and make 2 or 3 different choices just to get a different scene...

Anyway, the best part of the update was the german girl Sam, really well made, i hope she shows up in next updates.

 

[yosef66]

What is the consequence between "simple wash" and "hot wash"at chapter 1?

 

[Userz]

What is the consequence between "simple wash" and "hot wash"at chapter 1?

Nothing, it was a choice that was going to be relevant in the future but got forgotten

 

[madcunce]

I've downloaded the update, but the game won't run. I click on the .exe file to open it, the little hourglass symbol appears for a few seconds and it just disappears, with the game refusing to even open. I've tried restarting my PC, deleting and re-downloading the game and I even tried fucking around with some files, nothing works, the game just won't open. There is no log file, because I haven't been able to open the game since downloading the new update.

 

[MadfireMonkey]

Why do we suddenly not get any choices when we go to the convention?

 

[Gamma902]

What choice do I have to make to get the Orgy scene my game ended with a Marcus scene with Laura on the phone with Sam I saw in the files a scene with everyone except Marcus James and that guy with Ayame

 

[Gamma902]

What choice do I have to make to get the Orgy scene my game ended with a Marcus scene with Laura on the phone with Sam I saw in the files a scene with everyone except Marcus James and that guy with Ayame

I should have read the changelog lol you have to not watch porn channel

 

[Obranyi]

What choice do I have to make to get the Orgy scene my game ended with a Marcus scene with Laura on the phone with Sam I saw in the files a scene with everyone except Marcus James and that guy with Ayame

Put on novel when Laura/Marcus watch TV.

 

[SidWeideman]

I have my cons too, but destructive criticism is what has led many DVs to abandon their games.

Getting everything right and doing everything you said in detail is only for DVs with a large team, which is not the case here... when you have a large team, each person takes care of a detail, and when you develop games alone it is hard work and to please both Greeks and Trojans you need to be a master of miracles...

There are handwriting errors, yes, but that is not so worrying, since the game is being offered for free.

As for family, Laura's concern is to be an honest wife, but when you have a shitty husband like hers who is always drunk, tired or worried even during sex, no woman can stand to be without him even in real life and will give in to temptation seeing things that she does not find in her husband. Some paths didn't work out in this game, for example Jack asks Emma for help, she accepts and they arrange a time in the afternoon and that never happens because Laura goes to the cabaret with Jack that afternoon, that was really fucked up... another example is the meeting of the brother with Emma and the 4 guys from school, if it were a Unity game it would be game over, and here it almost does but DV put something in to repeat and not let sex happen with Emma... A lot of strange things but who are we to judge after all the game is neither mine nor yours and if DV wants it that way then so be it.

That post was written back in 2017, and the dev actually thanked him for it. So I wouldn't say it was destructive criticism.

NTR is generally a tragedy, even if shown in the comedic lense. I don't know if you played the first game, but Sam's background shows that the reason why he is the way he is is because he sacrifices his own wants and needs for the sake of others. Of all the males on the game, he is the most noble, and the tragedy of that is his reward is an unfaithful wife.

Laura's goals seem to be having a fulfilling sex life without losing her husband in the process. She proves to be annoyingly jealous of Sam and tries to keep him faithful often while cheating on him. If I could hazard a guess at her true desire, it would be to have a fulfilling sex life with Sam, but he is too distracted to provide this for her.

The tragedy for Laura is that the one thing that would probably get her what she wanted would be to help Sam...but she's too busy helping herself. And when she does help Sam, it is often at the secret expense of his dignity.

 

[Piyomon]

That post was written back in 2017, and the dev actually thanked him for it. So I wouldn't say it was destructive criticism.

NTR is generally a tragedy, even if shown in the comedic lense. I don't know if you played the first game, but Sam's background shows that the reason why he is the way he is is because he sacrifices his own wants and needs for the sake of others. Of all the males on the game, he is the most noble, and the tragedy of that is his reward is an unfaithful wife.

Laura's goals seem to be having a fulfilling sex life without losing her husband in the process. She proves to be annoyingly jealous of Sam and tries to keep him faithful often while cheating on him. If I could hazard a guess at her true desire, it would be to have a fulfilling sex life with Sam, but he is too distracted to provide this for her.

The tragedy for Laura is that the one thing that would probably get her what she wanted would be to help Sam...but she's too busy helping herself. And when she does help Sam, it is often at the secret expense of his dignity.

It's funny that you are justifying characters's reasons of a meaningless porn game