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Damn, this gorgeous game is ruined by the absolutely atrocious dialogue. If you're going to try to pull off bro humor, get a native English speaker to proofread/edit your text. The jokes are horrible. It's like this was written by a 12 year old.

Edit: I take it back, it's not like this was written by a 12 year old, this was literally written by a 12 year old. Totally juvenile and nonsensical. A crying shame, such wasted potential. The visuals are stunning.
I had the exact same reaction, swearing every other sentence. No coherent dialogue patterning or structure, I could write a better script in my sleep. But this is the difference between being a dik wannabe's and being a dik.
 
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You ask too much. It is not so important thing in game. People like you will always find what to complain about.
Bruh .. It's THAT important to you?
If is , Next time I call J.K Rowling
Hey, don't kink shame fappers with higher reading levels. You don't see us slapping "That's what she said." jokes out of your hands.
 

Pimpslap

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I had the exact same reaction, swearing every other sentence. No coherent dialogue patterning or structure, I could write a better script in my sleep. But this is the difference between being a dik wannabe's and being a dik.
If there's a bright spot, the dialogue does seem to improve after the prologue (I think the dev recruited a writer to help at some point). Hopefully, they make the decision to go back and fix the early writing, because if they leave it as the first impression, it'll continue to turn off people who give this game a shot. But if they can free themselves of this dead weight, I think it'll be smooth sailing for this project. The renders and animations are among the best I've seen here, even if some of the models look a little strange.
 
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Bibifoc

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Some people are still liking my 3 fixes from the OP. Does that mean they are still needed with 0.5.4? Because I thought they shouldn't :unsure:
 

Pr0nmanreview

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You know once you get out of the prologue things get a little better in terms of the flow and conversations. Not good still but I really think this could be better if the beginning was overhauled with a more competent writer. I almost gave up reading through it because of Ron and MC and just their shenanigans. The writing definitely leans into the "porn logic" style of content with some of the lucky encounters for our lead feeling unearned and out of left field, which isn't necessarily a bad thing for a porn game but it leans heavily into that realm. I know writing isn't important to a good chunk of people so feel free to ignore my opinion. I don't need a "It's porn bro, not a dissertation" reponses I get it but for me it matters a little.

I only played through once so I'm not sure how well choices change things but I will say the models and variety of girls is quite nice and is good enough to let me forgive the bad parts more than usual. Hope we get plenty of options for most of them in the future. I also hope we get more to do to make the free-roam sections worth it. Feels quite underutilized and a bit pointless in its current state.

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Overall I will likely check this out when the games fully developed. The general story and dialog could use more care and effort The models and animations are nice. The free-roaming feels a bit lackluster and choppy in its short presentation but it wasn't grindy or annoying. It's a solid 3/5 stars where it stands now.
 
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